Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
People may be buried in deep thought when they initially see the statement that when busy parents do not have much time to spend with their children, the best use of that time whether should be spending on doing sports or games or something related to schoolwork. Some people argue that parents should play games with their children. However, others would believe that it is better to do something related to schoolwork. I, myself, have to say that I incline to the first opinion.
The first and foremost thing is playing games or sports do strengthen the relationships between parents and children. A study shows that nearly 80% of children are craving for playing with their parents. As games and sports are interesting for most children, parents should spend more time with their children to make them happy. Thus it can build up a good relationship with their children, considering parents are always busy and it is so vital for them to do that. For example, my niece is 6 years old, and she always asked her parents to play games with her, especially her favorite game--- The pink pig, which is a puzzle game. But her parents are too busy to play with her. As a result, she became introvert and does not want to talk to her parents. On children's day, her parents promised to play the game with her, and that made her day.
Secondly, Playing sports games with children can reinforce skills of them such as teamwork spirit and collaboration. Education is quite important for children without any doubt. However, if parents do not have a lot of time instructing their children, that would be a problem. Therefore, the best of time is to make that up through playing sports with children. For instance, football is a sport which requires everyone to cooperate or it will never get succeed. Parents can teach their children how to play football well and instruct them the significance of working with others. I think that would be so helpful and meaningful for their children. Not only do they enjoy the game itself, but also learn how to grow.
Thirdly, games and sports can remind parents how to smile like children. Parents are always working so hard for the entire family. In most times, they seldom smile, which makes their children are a little scared of them. Therefore, games are the best solution. They can relieve their stress and enjoy the time with their children.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that when the parents are busy with their work and have no time to spend with their children, the best use of time is to play games or sports with their children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 331, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...with their children to make them happy. Thus it can build up a good relationship wit...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, well, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2128.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 451.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71840354767 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40591925282 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.425720620843 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 614.7 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.363469147 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.8461538462 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3461538462 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.69230769231 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.470337854369 0.236089414692 199% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145290736353 0.076458572812 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.12849367989 0.0737576698707 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.34677776156 0.150856017488 230% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.155103356299 0.0645574589148 240% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.8 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.72 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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