some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related schoolwork. use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Needless to say, one of the most important parents' duties, because of its impact on all aspects of children's lives, is spending time with them. Therefore, all parents have always been trying to spend time as much as they can with their children. In this regard, some people believe that in the modern time parents have less time to spend with their children, hence they have to do some things relate to children's schoolwork at limited time which they spend with their children. In contrast, I believe that parents have to allocate these times to play and have fun with their children. I will discuss my reasons in the following paragraphs.
Some individuals believe that schoolwork is the most important things for children in order to be success individuals in the future, hence parents have to do something related to schoolwork when they spend time with their children. Such people wrongly some children cannot learn subjects deeply in the class, hence parents have to help them to do their schoolwork in order to improve children's understanding from subjects to prepare them in so that find suitable job positions in the future. On the contrary, I disagree with this view, because when parents help children, children will rely on parents to solve problems which they face during study; consequently, instead of improving their creativity, this method will destroy their imagination that has negative impact on children's success in the future. You can take my cousin as the best example for this case. His parents used to help them to do their schoolwork; consequently, he had been able to get good scores during studying in the school, but after that he was not able to be success person in his job, because his parents could not help them in this situation. Thus, parents should not help children to do their schoolwork.
Parents have to spend their free time with their children to play and have fun in order to develop children's creativity. This topic has been discussed by many Psychologists that the majority of them believe that playing with children helps them to be more creative, because when they are playing they try to find new ways to face situations which they encounter during play; consequently, this situation will lead to generate new paths in their mind which it means children will become more creative. Therefore, these Psychologists have posed that parents have to spend much of their times which they spend with their children to play with them. I agree with this approach, because when parents play with their children they establish intimate relationships with their children that has positive impact on children's personality forming, since children's personality form based on their relationships. Bay way of illustration, I can refer to some statistics which have been published by several international health organizations. Based on these statistics approximately, all individuals who had intimate relationships with their parents have stronger personality and they are more success than other individuals. Thus, playing with children is the most important duty of parents in order to improve children's personality.
In brief, as I discussed in the previous paragraphs, some people believe that parents have to spend their times which they spend with their children to do somethings relate to children's schoolwork. In contrast, I argued that this approach is not correct for a couple of reasons. First, this approach lead to make individuals like sidekick persons, second, playing help children to be more creative and success individuals in the future.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, hence, second, so, therefore, thus, in brief, in contrast, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.0286738351 218% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 83.0 43.0788530466 193% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 100.0 52.1666666667 192% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3012.0 1977.66487455 152% => OK
No of words: 584.0 407.700716846 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15753424658 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.91590194646 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73393222999 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.375 0.524837075471 71% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 877.5 618.680645161 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 87.1879924746 48.9658058833 178% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.428571429 100.406767564 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8095238095 20.6045352989 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7619047619 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.426818215685 0.236089414692 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.178596681331 0.076458572812 234% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.141968767661 0.0737576698707 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.328387935138 0.150856017488 218% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0874114198206 0.0645574589148 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 11.7677419355 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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