Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Since children's education has become more and more important in the today's society, some people believe that parents who are too busy to share a lot of time with their children should use such limited time to have fun with their children, such as playing games or sports, while others holds an oppostire opinion. From my perspective, I prefer the previous statement.
First, today's children have too much pressure when they are in school, therefore they must be very tierd and have low efficency after school. The best way to help them recover from the burden is to relax and have fun with their parents, which will also make them more energetic in the following study. When I was in high schoool, my parents and I usually played baseball when we both had leasure time. And I felt rekindled after playing baseball with my parents, even though I was bothered by the schoolwork before then. My study efficiency also had been improved a lot after playing with my parents. It definitely helped me with my study. So when parents have time, using these time to play with their children in a good way to improve chidren's study performance.
Besides, playing together also acts as a good method to maintain the harmonic relationships between parents and their children, because by doing so, children might regard their parents as friends and become more willing to talk with them. Some parents who like to use all the spare time to instruct their children with the schoolwork do not have close relationships with their children at most of the time, owing to children's reluctance to share their real thoughts with their parents. Therefore, in order to maintain harmonic relationship with their children, parents definitely should devote their spare time to play with them.
Last but not the least, playing with their children also help a lot to keep the mental health of both children and parents. Students usually have a hard time when they are in school, same as their parents do at the work place. When they are not so busy, sharing such beautiful moments with each other can help ease their stress, and make all of them happy.
In a nutshell, I consider that parents should use their leasure time to have fun with their children, rather to do things related to schoolwork, because it will help improve children's study performance, maintain good relationships between them, and ease stress from both parents and their children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, so, then, therefore, while, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2029.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 413.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91283292978 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43027877962 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.457627118644 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 593.1 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 79.0431053287 48.9658058833 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.8125 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8125 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.125 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.481172979797 0.236089414692 204% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.169904590181 0.076458572812 222% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124364709141 0.0737576698707 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.306667811578 0.150856017488 203% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0509274790676 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.17 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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