Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
In my opinion, expending the time for the things associated with schoolwork have several advantages over playing sports or with toys. I feel this way for three main reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
First, young people can develop themselves by consuming time for their education, and establish great base for the learning. If they practice the lessons, they will probably succeed at the class thanks to the additional knowledge which they obtained by learning at home. Therefore, possibility of taking high grade at school will adequately increase. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter is influenced by my personal experience. When I was young, I solved the simple symbolic mathematics in order to kill time because my parents were busy working with document. Although I did not learn mathematics for my education but recreation, I started succeeding in the algebra and mathematics competition. Drawing from my own experience, spending time for appropriate and suitable matter will benefit young people largely.
Secondly, if young people study during the leisure, they will circumvent unnecessary compulsion of having fun since they may develop habit while playing things. Additionally, they will establish standpoint that learning is fun because they have never involved in other things. To illustrate this, I would like to share my own experience of studying at younger age. When I was five years old, my parents restricted me devoting time for unnecessary matters. Therefore, only thing I can do was learn without having friends. However, after few years, I started loving education without even intending, which is the main reason why I accomplished the highest grade in the high school and university. Conversely, my younger sister was free to watch cartoon and play games when she was three years old. Eventually, she developed habit to perform not requisite things but utilizing phone. Unfortunately, the pattern is hindering my sister to concentrate on the lesson and succeed.
Finally, playing sport at young age may be deleterious because children may be injured while playing, and going outside frequently will improve the exposure to the molesters. If they stay at home, they will be insulated from the any harm. This is the crucial issue in today's world, especially in the such developing country as Mongolia, my native country. In Mongolia, plenty of kids are abducted in the last several years because their parents are not able to pay attention to their children while they are playing outside.
To sum up, I am of the opinion of young people should spend time for studying when their parents are busy. This is because they will develop themselves, circumvent from habits and be protected from any harm and risk.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, finally, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, i feel, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2339.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 451.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18625277162 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7616904221 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529933481153 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 713.7 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.9699294477 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.4583333333 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7916666667 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.125 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187215097934 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0579062266946 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0625559240239 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118414203442 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0300348613501 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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