Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Parents are responsible for raising their children in a good way. In order to do that, they have to spend enough time with their kids. And if the parent's available time is limited, I think the best for their kids' interest is to have some fun and doing some sort of activities during their free time with their kids. I feel this way for several reasons, which I explore in the following essay.
Firstly, it is right that one of the most important issues that parents should take care of is their kids' performance at schools, but their role is not only limited to this function. Parents are also responsible to grow their children in a lovely environment and to build strong emotional connections with their kids. If the parents used to spend enough time with kids doing activites that are not related to schoolwork, there will be a chance to build these connections and create such a healthy environment. For instance, when I was a kid, my father's work required him to travel abroad many times among the year, and even if he was at the town, he was so busy with meetings and works obligations. Therefore, he merely spent time with us. But he cared that the time we spent together to be useful. And his approach to using this time effectively was to doing some entertainment activities and playing games with each other. As a result of this approach, we have a great conntections with each other as family members, and we made a really nice memorable moments.
Secondly, nowadays, schools are so sufficient in doing their works, and many times students are not required to do homework, specifically in the early levels of school. Moreover, many schools combine studying with playing as a new method to deliver educational materials. This method shows to which extent that playing is crucial for kids' development. Therefore, parents should not focus too much on schoolwork when their children back home. Because they are already got enough materials while they were at schools.
To conclude, parents should exercise different kinds of activities with their children during the time they spend together. This because parents role in building a strong relationship with their kids is more important than following up with school's homework, and schools are doing a good job in educating children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 443, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...hoolwork when their children back home. Because they are already got enough materials w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, as to, for instance, i feel, i think, sort of, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1915.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89769820972 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61385078122 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496163682864 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 573.3 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.2334715309 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.789473684 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5789473684 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.73684210526 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.392732574746 0.236089414692 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126709361006 0.076458572812 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.099365319948 0.0737576698707 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.247532514259 0.150856017488 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0818357379605 0.0645574589148 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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