Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
No one can deny the fact that today's parents have not sufficient time to spend with their children. Some proponents believe that parents can use their free time with their kids by playing games or sports, on the other hand, others believe that parents can devote their free time for their children by doing things related to schoolwork. In my point of view, it is better for both of them to have fun by playing games and sports. I feel this way for two reasons which are elaborated in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, playing games and sports benefit children and parents physically and mentally. To put it another way, playing games and sports not only increases their mood but also creates a strong relationship between them. Moreover, playing is good for children's personal and social development. They can learn how to try hard and focus better to win and achieve their goals. As a result, only when they win they understand the difficult process of winning and it enables them to improve their confidence. Playing sports improves the parents and children's mood and decrease their stress and anxiety; in addition, it is beneficial for their heath as well. Parents by playing sports can easily find their kid's talents and interests in sports. Consequently, parents can provide a proper condition for their children to become professional in their interests.
Secondly, Children should learn to study and do their schoolwork alone in order to grow independently. In my opinion, children should learn how to do their tasks without any help from their parents. Only if children do their jobs independently they can face various problems and learn how to solve them. Thus, it is better for parents to spend their free time by playing with kids instead of doing things for school work in order to communicate with their children in many sectors to increase their public knowledge and teach them some life skills which would be indispensable when they grow up.
Another perspective which I want to look at as well is due to the fact that when children play games alone they cannot manage the time they spend on it, but playing games with parents is a superior way to control the time that is devoted for playing.
The main conclusion that can be drawn from the mentioned arguments is that playing games and sports is an effective way that can be done by parents and children during their free time for several reasons including, improving children's social and personal development, creating a formidable relationship, to name but a few.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2125.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 432.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91898148148 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55155076538 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.462962962963 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 603.9 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.0514973351 48.9658058833 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.055555556 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.72222222222 5.45110844103 178% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.363242084732 0.236089414692 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127429180443 0.076458572812 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104278902069 0.0737576698707 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233704334009 0.150856017488 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.121883702162 0.0645574589148 189% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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