Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Throughout history, children have been playing a crucial role in parents’ lives. In this circumstance, lack of enough time for parents due to hectic lifestyle limit the type of activities that parents do with their children. In this regard, there is a controversial debate among individuals about the most beneficial activities that parents can carry out with their young children. Some people may hold the view that parents should have fun like playing games or sports, while, some others take an opposite viewpoint. The latter group states that parent should use their time doing things related to schoolwork. I strongly contend that parents should spend their time on fun and sports with their children. In the following, I will elaborate upon my standpoint through two pieces of evidence.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that it is generally agreed that doing sports and games is an excellent way of relieving stress. Needless to say that those children who have less chance to meet their parents bear more anxiety thanks to the fact that they required to deal with their problems on their own. In other words, producing a refreshing atmosphere by doing funny games or sports can assist these children to enjoy more from their life. Take a personal experience as an example; when I studied in primary school, I used to visit my father just at weekends due to the reason that he was required to work in another city. My father and I used to do a lot of various tasks with each other like dealing with school work and even playing football in our yard. The interesting point was that whenever we played football, I felt my batteries have become fully charged. Hadn’t we paled with each other on weekends, I would not have had the opportunity to relieve my stress and do my best during the weekdays.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that doing funny games paves the way for socializing. When people do these activates need to interact with each other. Moreover, parents playing with their children enable children to speak with them about various issues. Therefore, no one can neglect the fact that doing funny games in family enhance not only family interactions but also their relationships. According to a recent study that was published in Time magazine, researchers investigated the behavior of two different families. Although both families required spending some time with each other, they did various tasks. The results of the study show that while family members tend to do fun activities, they spend more time with each other. Therefore, the more family members spend time with each other, the more they interact which positively impact on family relationships.
In brief, one can logically conclude that spending time for funny sports can benefit children more than dealing with schoolwork regarding relieving their stress and impacts of funny games on their ties of relationship with parents. However, there are other reasons, challenging theses reasons, not mentioned above. All in all, it is highly recommended that a survey can assess the profound results of these strategies on family members' morale.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 104, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ny games paves the way for socializing. When people do these activates need to inter...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, therefore, while, in brief, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2650.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 522.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07662835249 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77988695657 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58306322345 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498084291188 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 793.8 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.2792282167 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.0 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.88 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.12 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.431183860176 0.236089414692 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124624886178 0.076458572812 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0771780687777 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.256856604889 0.150856017488 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102746763187 0.0645574589148 159% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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