Some people think that governments should spend as much money as possible on developing or buying computer technology. Other people disagree and think that this money should be spent on more basic needs. Which one of these opinions do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
Who has not listened to the common statement that health is first from other needs? Think about it and you will maybe realize that this is true. According to the pyramid of needs for people; primary needs, which are for example health and food are above other needs denominated secondary and sumptuary ones. This pyramid states that it is most important for humans to satisfy the needs which are first, in that order for be good and happy. By this mean, technology should be considered by governments a lesser level of need when it distributes its money. Though many people think that governments should invest its money in order to develop its technology, I strongly believe that governments should spend its money on more basic needs of its own people because this money belongs to them, many people die from hunger and health is a main issue which government must take care.
First and foremost, where do governments receive this money to spend from? Yes, it is true that from its own governed people, which it earns by taxes, for example. Remembering the pyramid of need stated in previously, is not true that people would be better if their basic needs were satisfied? Governments should spend its money, which really belongs to its people, in order to satisfy their main needs not what governments think it is much better. Buying or improving technology could not make all the people happy, due to everyone has different needs. But the main needs are universal, thus everybody wanted to get these principal needs satisfied. This is a right that the people have over the money which is spent by governments, due to the fact that these governments just manage it.
Secondly, hunger is a large problem which is present over the world. People die because food does not reach them and there is no correct split of revenues of a country. For this reason, when governments start to think how to spend its money, they should think first in satisfying the hunger of its people in order to stop these deaths and improve the quality of its people’s lives.
Last but not least, hunger is accompanied by health. Everyone wants health for their family instead other needs that they want to get. Although governments always say that health is for everyone in its country, this is not completely true. Wealthy people get the best treatments available in a country and it is usual that poor people do not achieve a correct treatment or even a medical prescription due to there is not enough doctors and facilities for everyone. By this mean, governments should focus not just in food for people but in maintaining its people healthy.
In a nutshell, for all these factors, we can reach the conclusion that although some people think that it is much better that a government spends its money in improving technology, because they probably think this fact will facilitate our lives. Personally I believe that it is much better to invest this money in principal needs as health and food.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: "needs denominated" is only accepted in certain dialects. For something more widely acceptable, try 'denominating' or 'to be denominated'.
Suggestion: denominating; to be denominated
...e health and food are above other needs denominated secondary and sumptuary ones. This pyra...
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Message: "needs satisfied" is only accepted in certain dialects. For something more widely acceptable, try 'satisfiing' or 'to be satisfied'.
Suggestion: satisfiing; to be satisfied
...ody wanted to get these principal needs satisfied. This is a right that the people have o...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'really', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'thus', 'for example', 'it is true']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.214159292035 0.229887763892 93% => OK
Verbs: 0.16814159292 0.158761421928 106% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0973451327434 0.0866891130778 112% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0548672566372 0.046263068375 119% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0654867256637 0.0685040099705 96% => OK
Prepositions: 0.12389380531 0.118717715034 104% => OK
Participles: 0.0265486725664 0.0351676179071 75% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.47809887835 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0300884955752 0.0309702414327 97% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0743362831858 0.0887237588012 84% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0212389380531 0.0209618222197 101% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0247787610619 0.0139019557991 178% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2992.0 2387.08602151 125% => OK
No of words: 513.0 408.028673835 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.83235867446 5.86048508987 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75914943092 4.48200974243 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.323586744639 0.338922669872 95% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.200779727096 0.251872472559 80% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.132553606238 0.174417080927 76% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.103313840156 0.112833075102 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47809887835 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.426900584795 0.524397521467 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 48.8018450244 59.2087087015 82% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6684587814 111% => OK
Sentence length: 22.3043478261 20.5533526081 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.9820972874 48.84282405 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.086956522 120.699889404 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3043478261 20.5533526081 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.478260869565 0.644075263715 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 42.3823205356 45.7405998639 93% => OK
Elegance: 1.26380368098 1.45489161554 87% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.348305750931 0.300154397459 116% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.136432337386 0.103427244359 132% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0772186498089 0.0752933317313 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.503887693014 0.497263757937 101% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.15062422152 0.151897553556 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131228682864 0.114077575197 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0731768079004 0.0781384742642 94% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.428931151235 0.336927656856 127% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.122791043757 0.067059652881 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.243660139658 0.210909579961 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0722207512331 0.0618886996521 117% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8870967742 109% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.86379928315 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.91756272401 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 8.42114695341 131% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.75985663082 145% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.6433691756 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.