television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
We cannot cast any doubt on this fact that television programs and advertising have a deep influence on people’s mind. When something is that much powerful which can change the way of people’s thought, it worth to analyze it carefully and see which target group each of these programs and advertisings have. Some people think it should not be allowed to show advertisings which is directed to young children, while others disagree. In my view, television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed and I would like to elaborate my opinion with following reasons.
First and foremost, most of the times, television advertisings do not tell the truth. One of the most obvious characteristics of young children (aged two to five) is that they trust everything they see or hear and because advertisings do not always tell the truth, it is better not to use them directly toward young children and Deceive them. Whenever young children see an advertising in television, they think that the reality is exactly as is said by advertising and when realize that people have defrauded him, it will be a big disappointment which leads to this issue that they will not trust to others anymore. last year, when I was in an office waiting to see my professor, I saw a young children staring at the television which was showing an advertising for toys and suddenly he said: "You are all liars. I have this toy and it is not as you say, I do not trust you anymore," and then he left his toy there and came to his mother while crying. In my view, losing trust about advertisings is something that can happen for adults too, but when it happens for a child, it can have worse effects on him.
Second, young children cannot decide wisely. One of the things which make advertisings useful is this point that they can help us to make our mind about the things we need and choose between different options, but young children cannot think properly and choose the product which is the best for them. When we see an advertising, we can know properties of the product and after knowing about different choices, decide which product may be the best for us. In my view, young children cannot analyze different aspects of products and they just choose based on the appearance of products. So, it is not good to pursue children to buy some products which may not be good for them just because they have nice shape or appearance and that is why I think advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed
To cut the long story short, all I want to say is that, target group of advertisements are really important and we must pay a deep attention to this point that whom are watching what. It will be better not to let companies to make advertising for all ages. why so, children in this age range, who are potential consumers of specific products, have a lack of clear decision making ability and also advertising may make bad influences on them too. That is why I believe television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, really, second, so, then, while, i think, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 9.8082437276 224% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 28.0 11.0286738351 254% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2589.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 549.0 407.700716846 135% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71584699454 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84053189512 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66097713891 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.424408014572 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 783.0 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 87.5041621585 48.9658058833 179% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.833333333 100.406767564 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.5 20.6045352989 148% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.38888888889 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.453868942897 0.236089414692 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.184790944533 0.076458572812 242% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.209837768132 0.0737576698707 284% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.328243118128 0.150856017488 218% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0704977740544 0.0645574589148 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 11.7677419355 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.95 58.1214874552 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.69 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.08 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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