In today's competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents go out to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents' absence. Dis

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In today's competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents go out to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents' absence. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

My childhood memory somehow connects to the valuable time with my parents including playing outside, cooking together and family trips. By concluding those memories, I would say that my parents support for my happiness was the most essential things happened in my childhood. Hence, based on my memory, I think parents should spend time with their children especially in their age of 0-16 including teenage years. So that, kids will learn other soft skill beneficial for their further life from their parents. Because school and kinder-garden does substitute the skills and knowledge learned by their parents. However, the living condition was not comfortable because of insufficient of financial budget. Hence, this discussion has both pros and cons

Comparing to old times with nowadays, it is totally different. Today, in my home country, to earn sufficient income, it is not enough to work scheduled time, we should work overtime to earn more money for our family. For this reason, the most parent spend much less time with their kids. For example, my husband and I both work very hard and earned enough but sadly we spend only one day a week with our children. Even I understand the side effect of absence of childcare, in this modern society it is hard to balance. But I would say that it is better to have comfortable living condition that living insufficient foods and supplies.

In conclusion, I would say that both discussion will affect positively and negatively to our child. Henceforth it is important to balance our lives for our children and family.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, so, for example, i think, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 52.1666666667 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1311.0 1977.66487455 66% => OK
No of words: 260.0 407.700716846 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04230769231 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64864596422 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.580769230769 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 391.5 618.680645161 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 23.5195316141 48.9658058833 48% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 93.6428571429 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5714285714 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57142857143 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182006372543 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.061299214982 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0327809591592 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114669723808 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0410854084971 0.0645574589148 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
More content wanted.

Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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