Nowadays, people tend to spend more time on leisure activities instead of focusing on their main objectives or their responsibilities. This can be witnessed by the increasing use of internet and computer games along with other factors.
Since, internet is easily accessible by everyone around the globe has led people to be less focused on their studies and work. Social Media sites such as Facebook, Twitter, Snapchat, Instagram etc have impacted the population to such an extend that has caused them to lose focus on their aims. For example, many teenagers and even adults spend ample amount of time facebooking including me. There was one time when I used to sit for hours facebooking and wasting time instead of studying and because of that I failed some of my exams.
Also, people tend to use these platforms in order to enjoy such as playing farmville, that was one of the most popular games in 2014. And sometimes people play that for hours without realizing that it is time to eat or sleep. That further results in loss of appetite and reduced health. Also, they get sleep deprived and results in poor efficiency throughout the day. Like my cousin, she was extremely addicted to farmville that she often used to play for hours late night on the phone that caused her to wake up all exhausted and was not able carry out normal routine work during the day.
If you spend too much time on enjoyment, it does not only jeopardize your health but it also restricts your ability to achieve your goal. For example, I was planning to start the university in January 2018 but I was extremely addicted to playing 'Dota' (computer game) that I used to play for 5 hours straight everyday. Thinking that I will apply in the mid of January. However, the time passed by and not only this but I missed the deadline. And then I had to apply in February instead. Addiction caused me to be irresponsible about my aim and delayed my achievement.
Personal enjoyment is also needed in order to keep yourself motivated and fresh and it also aids in achieving our main goals. Like, when I had an objective to work and I wanted to ride bicycle everyday to work. This helped me achieve my goal as well as I enjoyed my way to work. And not only this but I was also able to reduce weight.
Balancing your personal enjoyment along with things that you need to do is not difficult. This can be easily managed when you try to make and follow your schedule. Like during the time I was working, I was able to assign one hour to the computer game and the rest to focus on my work and education. In this way I was able to do both without damaging either one. Because if I do not enjoy at all then I can become stressful and tired. Therefore, it is important to maintain balance between the two.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 235, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...tc have impacted the population to such an extend that has caused them to lose focus on t...
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Line 7, column 307, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...hat I used to play for 5 hours straight everyday. Thinking that I will apply in the mid ...
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Line 9, column 194, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...ve to work and I wanted to ride bicycle everyday to work. This helped me achieve my goal...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, then, therefore, well, for example, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2280.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 501.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55089820359 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73107062784 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47511589636 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49500998004 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 728.1 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.9038865865 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.4444444444 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5555555556 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.07407407407 5.45110844103 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13886894944 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0399043685656 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0604895034044 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0715369669297 0.150856017488 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0667336627923 0.0645574589148 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.11 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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