People have different ideas about the question of whether or not television advertising directed towards young children from the age of two to five should not be allowed. Some people think that at the age of two to five, children should be allowed to watch television advertising. Some other people would not agree with this statement. In my point of view, I support the idea that people should select the advertising that can be suitable for children and allow them to watch it. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, watching appropriate advertising on television will help children to be more active. We all know that at the age of two to five, the brain of children develop raptly. If people know how to take advantage of this time to let children to watch the ads, which suit their age, such as some kinds of mathematics game. It can help children a lot. My nephew is a compelling example of this case. He is five years old now. Every day after supper, his mom let him watch the advertising about the function of cereal and some kinds of fruits. He enjoyed watching these ads. Now he is able to tell what vitamins contains in oranges, strawberries and many other fruits, as well as which way is the best method to keep fruit fresh. This point demonstrates that watching advertising brings many benefits to children.
Another reason is that when children at the age of two to five watch advertising, they usually repeat what they have seen on the screen, it is a good way for them to learn to speak clearly. It is no doubt the children are often good at imitating other voices. Therefore, when they watch advertising on television they tend to follow the voice of people speaking in ads. For instance, my sister told me that she was surprises about her daughter. At the age of four her daughter can mimic many the tones of voice of the people on advertising. It is that people in my country, Vietnam have different actions in speaking. It is not easy for us to imitate the voice of people in other locations, but my niece can speak correctly the voice of people in the south and in the north of my country.
In conclusion, people have their own ideas about the issues of whether or not people should allow children to watch television ads. In my opinion, for two reason, which I have just mentioned above, I strongly support the idea that it is very good for children at the age of two to five to watch the television ads.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...ave their own ideas about the issues of whether or not people should allow children to watch t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, therefore, well, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, as well as, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2043.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 451.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52993348115 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47144945303 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.436807095344 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 623.7 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.6023404786 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.125 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7916666667 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228175135259 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0751479414164 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0741092459097 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1659248018 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0892369125322 0.0645574589148 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.81 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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