School is the center of the knowledge where we learn the variety of the subjects to face the challenges in the complex society. The classroom practice illuminates the student skill to get a better position in their life. Some people believe deep knowledge on the variety of subjects is good for them and others not. Personally, In my view, every learner must have been an expert in the different subject matters because today the world is too competitive and also good for the better job.
First, studying and gaining knowledge from the variety of the subjects aid to face the challenges in the real world because it is too competitive. Nowadays the number of people are searching for the job and everyone has multiple skills. So if we need to compete with them, we should be expert in the different field. for example recently one of my friends applied for the lecturing job, in fact, his job is to teach. however, he learns how to operate the computer and other communicational skill. when he attended the interview the school management gave him high credit for his extra skill compare to his education. in contrast, the rest of the people rejected even though they are highly qualified in their profession.
Second, learning various academic subjects open a wide area of the employment. the students those are trained in the variety of the academic topics, they will get the job quickly because they can apply for work in different fields. For example, when I was studying for my masters, I took health informatics because it is a combination of the science and the technology. What more, within a couple days after completed my graduation I got a job opportunity from the software company. it might not possible if I study only science.
In conclusion, learning different subjects play a vital role in the carrier to compete with the real world and also for the better job opportunities
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, second, so, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, in fact, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1572.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 325.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83692307692 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67498426694 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541538461538 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 487.8 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.2524642979 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.4705882353 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1176470588 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.76470588235 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.102870020568 0.236089414692 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0356555292429 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0366492301874 0.0737576698707 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0761944496318 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0334325210276 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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