TPO-14 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Every person has dream to travel whole world. Each person has their own choices to visit the country. I want to visit the United State, Switzerland and Peru is my aspirations. As like me there are many people wants to travelling different countries. However, all people not think same as me. Some people like to visit their own country to get the benefits. Although, some people visiting their own country to learn own country culture and experience, I would like to traveling foreign countries for following reasons.
To begin with, visiting foreign countries is chance to learn variety of languages. As comparing to own country I aware the many languages, so, visiting own country is not learn a new things. For an example, one year ago, my cousin went America, when he share his experience to me, I m very excited to visit the America because he learned English and Spanish language. In English language, he was intermediate but after visit in America he is now fluently speak English without any hesitate and grammar mistakes.
Furthermore, person gain the experience of new place, new climate and variety of culture. I live in India there are three climates I ever experience summer, spring and winter. Three year ago, my job gave chance to some employees to attending conference of pharmaceutical manufacturing plants. I went Canada for attending conference meeting. The weather of Canada I never seen before and in snow I did skiing and played other sports games. I really enjoyed there climate and culture of the Canada also interesting. In future, if I have chance to visit Canada, I definitely go to there.
Moreover, making new friends and meet the various people of the different country are unique chance for me. For an instance, when my father went the United Kingdom. He made too many friends in there and also some friends are still contact to my father. In which one of my father friend give the proposal to my father for planning to manufacture wood products because of my father has good knowledge about the wood material and their products. Some foreign people help to us to make better future.
In conclusion, contemplating aforementioned reasons, traveling other countries getting a lot of benefits such as experience of new place environment and their culture, learn different languages and meet new people and making friends. Therefore, I disagree with statement that traveling own country get the benefits than traveling to other countries.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 18, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'dreamed', 'dreamt'.
Suggestion: dreamed; dreamt
Every person has dream to travel whole world. Each person has ...
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Line 1, column 177, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...Switzerland and Peru is my aspirations. As like me there are many people wants to ...
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Line 1, column 416, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to own'
Suggestion: to own
...ple visiting their own country to learn own country culture and experience, I would...
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Line 2, column 172, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'learned', 'learnt'.
Suggestion: learned; learnt
...guages, so, visiting own country is not learn a new things. For an example, one year ...
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Line 2, column 184, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'thing'?
Suggestion: thing
...visiting own country is not learn a new things. For an example, one year ago, my cousi...
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Line 2, column 254, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'shares'.
Suggestion: shares
...ar ago, my cousin went America, when he share his experience to me, I m very excited ...
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Line 3, column 402, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'ski'
Suggestion: ski
...a I never seen before and in snow I did skiing and played other sports games. I really...
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Line 3, column 515, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'In the future'?
Suggestion: In the future
...culture of the Canada also interesting. In future, if I have chance to visit Canada, I de...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, really, so, still, therefore, in conclusion, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2061.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 411.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01459854015 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73214667904 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496350364964 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 654.3 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.1324173505 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.44 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.44 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.56 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183359633097 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0602804811568 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0864715312555 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116189430397 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102879883416 0.0645574589148 159% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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