In the technological advance era, people should manage their money in order to survive and to have a better life. Most people believe that children should learn to save money in order to use in the future, some people do not believe this behavior. As far as I concern, I strongly support this idea and concur with former people that the children should learn to manage their money as behavior skill. Definitely, it would cause a lot of positive advantages. My reasons listed below.
The first thing that immediately comes to mind is that children and young teenager should save their money. At first, parents have an important role in helping children. Most of the children when they want to go school, they receive lots of money to spend at school. If they save a part of money every day, they have a big saving at end of month. For instant, one of my cousin every day receive $10 of their parent and every day he saves a part of money after ten months he bought a cellphone yesterday. Additionally, by recommending children to save more money, they can manage his/her life.
In addition, Children before buying something should consult with their adult. Most of children every day spend lots of money in order to buy a gadgets, go sightseeing and other entertainment for his/her hobby. Adult can help children by piece of advice that has a good impression. Moreover, adult have an important experience and they can change children's mind by creating a deposit for every children to encourage them to save money. Hence, children should manage his/her money by paying attention to their parent's advice.
Lastly, most of teenagers and children should have a course at school to learn how they can manage his /her money. Every school should take a new course in order to help children and young teenager in this way. For example, in this course, the teacher should help children by learning some methods which children can manage their financial. So, the children and young teenager would learn to manage their money.
To make it brief, by understanding the methods of managing money, children able to manage his/her money. Parent should pay attention to children by encourage them to manage his/her financial. Consequently, parent and school have important role in this policy.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 79, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'Most of', you should use 'the' ('Most of the children') or simply say ''Most children''.
Suggestion: Most of the children; Most children
...ething should consult with their adult. Most of children every day spend lots of money in order ...
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Line 3, column 142, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a gadget' or simply 'gadgets'?
Suggestion: a gadget; gadgets
...day spend lots of money in order to buy a gadgets, go sightseeing and other entertainment...
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Line 4, column 9, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the teenagers') or simply say ''most teenagers''.
Suggestion: most of the teenagers; most teenagers
...ntion to their parents advice. Lastly, most of teenagers and children should have a course at sc...
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Discourse Markers used:
['consequently', 'first', 'hence', 'if', 'lastly', 'moreover', 'so', 'for example', 'in addition']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.270833333333 0.229887763892 118% => OK
Verbs: 0.150462962963 0.158761421928 95% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0671296296296 0.0866891130778 77% => OK
Adverbs: 0.025462962963 0.046263068375 55% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0648148148148 0.0685040099705 95% => OK
Prepositions: 0.115740740741 0.118717715034 97% => OK
Participles: 0.0208333333333 0.0351676179071 59% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.50017004417 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0462962962963 0.0309702414327 149% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0787037037037 0.0887237588012 89% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0393518518519 0.0209618222197 188% => Less modal verbs wanted (like 'must , shall , will , should , would , can , could , may , and might').
WH_determiners: 0.0115740740741 0.0139019557991 83% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2275.0 2387.08602151 95% => OK
No of words: 388.0 408.028673835 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.86340206186 5.86048508987 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.48200974243 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.378865979381 0.338922669872 112% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.226804123711 0.251872472559 90% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.154639175258 0.174417080927 89% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0773195876289 0.112833075102 69% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50017004417 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.432989690722 0.524397521467 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 45.3666587707 59.2087087015 77% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6684587814 111% => OK
Sentence length: 16.8695652174 20.5533526081 82% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.9544567438 48.84282405 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.9130434783 120.699889404 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8695652174 20.5533526081 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.391304347826 0.644075263715 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.54480286738 54% => OK
Readability: 39.5499775885 45.7405998639 86% => OK
Elegance: 1.69230769231 1.45489161554 116% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.364856693806 0.300154397459 122% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.145323610528 0.103427244359 141% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.109162193244 0.0752933317313 145% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.504019532401 0.497263757937 101% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.166552012699 0.151897553556 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.149851390175 0.114077575197 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.090029617081 0.0781384742642 115% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.42054017524 0.336927656856 125% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0794065213465 0.067059652881 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.266849481359 0.210909579961 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0588556693346 0.0618886996521 95% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8870967742 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.86379928315 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.91756272401 142% => OK
Positive topic words: 16.0 8.42114695341 190% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 2.4623655914 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.75985663082 217% => OK
Total topic words: 22.0 13.6433691756 161% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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