TPO-17:Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Advertising is one of the most useful ways for enterprise to convince their customers of the products. In fact, advertisements should be honest that it contains real information of the product. Meanwhile nowadays advertisement appears to be more misleading and make products better from the appearance.
Advertisement seems to make us hard to tell the reality from the fantasy. There is a specific example. When targeted to the young children, enterprises tend to use fantasy themes and characters from fantasy movies to help show off their product. Since young children tend not to tell the reality to the fantasy, they will be misled and believe that the product appearing in the advertisement is worth buying. But in fact, the quality of the product will disappoint its buyers.
Moreover, nowadays manufacturers tend to ask celebrities to advertise their products. This will also be misleading, too. The celebrities who advertise the product may not use the product at all and he knows nothing about the product. But the audiences tend to believe him since they think the celebrity is always responsible for what he said in a public situation. The celebrity makes this product worth buying, but in fact, it is not as good as the thing appears on the television.
Sometimes manufacturers just do not ask any celebrities to help them with advertising. What they do is just to find someone acting as the users of the product. This will be even more misleading since they better convince the audience that the product is of great use, since the audience tends to believe people who have something in common with themselves. On the contrary, the product is not usually so valuable that the audience is cheated by merchants. Under these circumstances advertisements seem misleading and make people feel better about the product.
Although there is possibility that some advertisements are worth believing at most time advertisement seems to guide us to a wrong direction.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
...ntains real information of the product. Meanwhile nowadays advertisement appears to be mo...
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Message: The word 'someone' in subjunctive clause must be used with a base form of a verb: 'act'.
...g. What they do is just to find someone acting as the users of the product. This will ...
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ople feel better about the product. Although there is possibility that some advertis...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, so, while, in fact, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1658.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 323.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13312693498 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9729133401 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.482972136223 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 505.8 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.0464411842 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.2631578947 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.42105263158 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223679915308 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0778052003731 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.041315875394 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137242023727 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0326949459982 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.