TPO-18 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Question: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is no doubt that the youngsters nowadays depend on their parents in almost of their needs. I certainly agree that the youngsters are able to make decisions about their own lives and their future today rather than in the past. Someone can consciously weigh the pros and cons of each side. The explanations go as follows.
Firstly, spread of technology and the internet make the young people have an opening mind rather than the last. For example, by comparing my situation with my little brother Seif. I'm older than Seif by about twelve years, when I was at secondary school, I dreamed to enter the Faculty of Dentistry but unfortunately I have gotten degrees lower than the degrees needed to join the Dentistry College. I remember that I was very disappointed those days and did not know what I could do. So, I resorted to my parents as they have a much experience than me and asked them what I should do? Finally, they decided that I should apply for the Faculty of Science and that's what already happened. In the contrary, my brother was exposed to the same situation and my Mam and Dad tried a lot to persuade him to apply for Faculty of Engineering. But, he is a good follower to social media and the economic news and he discovers that the business is the key for better life recently. In order to that he decided to join the Faculty of Business Administration.
Furthermore, Listen and read about successful models can influence young people’s decisions. For instance, when my father was graduated since 40 years, my grandfather had decided that he should travel to Saudi Arabia like the majority of his generation in order to find a good job. In the earlier years the dominant believe was if you want to be a rich, you should travel to Saudi Arabia. But nowadays the world has another side, so if you want to be successful and effective, you should take care of your education and research. My other brother Mahmoud likes to read about successful scientists like Ahmed Zewil and others, Indeed he admires what they introduce to the humanity. In order to that he does not listen to my father advice for travelling to the North East and he decides to study hard and takes the Toefl exam for applying to the USA universities.
In sum, I see that the openness of the new world and the spread of communication forms also, love of knowledge affect the young people and improve their thinking.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 180, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
... situation with my little brother Seif. Im older than Seif by about twelve years, ...
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Line 3, column 526, Rule ID: A_MUCH_NN1[1]
Message: Maybe you should omit the article "a", leaving only 'much'.
Suggestion: much
..., I resorted to my parents as they have a much experience than me and asked them what ...
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Line 3, column 658, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
...ld apply for the Faculty of Science and thats what already happened. In the contrary,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, so, for example, for instance, no doubt

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2225.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 475.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68421052632 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66845742379 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57604562854 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509473684211 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 692.1 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.7690702893 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.7391304348 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.652173913 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.34782608696 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178929565908 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0624255088315 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0973789889247 0.0737576698707 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123907093471 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108553274306 0.0645574589148 168% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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