TPO 21
it is unquestionable that developing a broad group of known and friends is it essential for the profession">professional future of everyone. Whether it is more relevant have a extense networking or studying hard during in school, though, it is a matter of intense debate. As far as I am concerned. I don’t concur with the affirmation. this position is based on two solid reason that will be analyzed more thoroughly below.
To begin with, it doesn’t matter how well are you trying with people, if you don’t have the knowledge and the skills recquired to be an outstanding profession">professional you will never be successful. Being sociable and skillful to interact with people is a plus in some carreers like socials science or public relationship. However, even those profession recquire to master other abilities and to study another topic to be excelent profession">professional. An illustrative example of that is the case of my brother John. he always, since eh was a child, has been good socializing with people of both genders. he started to work in a Apple store and after some years the position of manager was available and he wanted to get it. he applied but in the interview, he was not able to show other skills like, lidership or organisative capacity, required for the position. To make a long history short, that happended because he had not more than high school and he had not a good preparation.
Secondly, the prestigue and the success is directly related with how extraordinary are you in your profession, and to get that level of excelence, you need to prepared well and take advantage of you time in school. To prove this affirmation we just need to read about the life of some successful people, not only in intelectual field, but also in sports, art or any other field. I can mnetion some example like, michael Jordan, Albert Einstein, michael Jackson, Bill Gates. All of them putan extraordinary effort not only practicing their abilities to become in the best in ther respectives field, but also they studied hard to obtain the knowledge needed to excel over other people which were not willing to give the sacrifice.
In summation, I am of the opinion that to use the time in school properly is the key to be successful in you future profession">professional carrer. this is because if you don’t have the necessary preparation you won’t capable to improve your carrer, and because only with the practice and and the knowledge acquire in the school you will able to shine in your profession.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
it is unquestionable that developing a bro...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ryone. Whether it is more relevant have a extense networking or studying hard dur...
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Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ough, it is a matter of intense debate. As far as I am concerned. I don't con...
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...don't concur with the affirmation. this position is based on two solid reason t...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'socials'' or 'social's'?
Suggestion: socials'; social's
... people is a plus in some carreers like socials science or public relationship. However...
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Line 5, column 360, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this profession' or 'those professions'?
Suggestion: this profession; those professions
...e or public relationship. However, even those profession recquire to master other abilities and ...
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...of that is the case of my brother John. he always, since eh was a child, has been ...
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...ocializing with people of both genders. he started to work in a Apple store and af...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... of both genders. he started to work in a Apple store and after some years the po...
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...rofession'>professional carrer. this is because if you don't have the n...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: and
...rer, and because only with the practice and and the knowledge acquire in the school you...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, second, secondly, so, well, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2167.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05128205128 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.77143931271 2.67179642975 141% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536130536131 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 679.5 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.4099345009 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.052631579 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5789473684 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.42105263158 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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