TPO-22 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teachers should not make their social or political views known to students in the classroom.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

The purpose of students to go to school is to gain academic knowledge. The responsibility of professors is to teach students and help them to learn as good as possible. As a student, I totally agree with the statement that the teachers should not make their social or political views known to students in the classroom. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, classroom is a place for students to study. We all acknowledge that education plays a pivotal role in our lives. In other words, our lives depend on our education. People cannot have a job without knowledge. Meanwhile, time to study in school is limited. Therefore, both teachers and students should take advantage of time in school to teach and gain as much knowledge as possible. Moreover, a class jus lasts for about forty-five minutes, and students have to pay money for their studies and teachers receive money from their teaching. If they do not use their time to perform their jobs effectively. It will cause a lot of problem to them and to society as well. My own experience is a compelling example of this case. When I was in nursing college. My biology teacher was addicted to shopping. She could talk about shopping without ending. Whenever, she bought new things, she told us how to buy them and it seemed to me that she was an advertiser of those things. Our class were frequently full of noisy. Many of us loved her class just because we could gossip and we did not have to prepare the lessons for the class at all. However, at the end of that semester, none of us achieved a good mark, meanwhile biology was a required course. It happened because my biology teacher did not spend her time to convey biological knowledge to us.
Another reason is that talking about social and political issues in class will sometime do harm students. It is no doubt that in some cases, some politic news will help students to know more about social life, but in general speaking, talking about these concepts in classrooms is unsuitable. Many time students might not understand what professors meant, they might conflict each other. It is a waste of time. I remember clearly that when I was in high school. My history loved to tell us local news. There was a news regarded to her and she felt angry with the editor of that news. She complained about that editor whenever she began to teach us in our classroom. As a result, we had a bad attitude to that editor, meanwhile we did not know whether our history teacher’s story about that editor was right or not.
In conclusion, I totally agree with the statement that teachers should not make their social or political views known to students in the classroom because classroom is not only a place for students to gain knowledge, but also if teachers talk about their own views about their social and political lives will do harm to students.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, i feel, in conclusion, in general, no doubt, talking about, as a result, first of all, in other words, in some cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 73.0 43.0788530466 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2396.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 516.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64341085271 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76609204519 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54210974898 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.459302325581 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 734.4 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6003584229 155% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 59.1512890815 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.875 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.125 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78125 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256803153441 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0581026160331 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103717676264 0.0737576698707 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220522045647 0.150856017488 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118089155436 0.0645574589148 183% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 11.7677419355 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.15 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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