TPO-27 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.Use specific reasons and ex

I disagree with this statement which says that when we are getting job that gives more security but it is not more satisfied job us. In order to strength my opinion, I want to explore some demerits regarding unsatisfying jobs such mental stress, unhappiness, feeling of inferiority complex, less productivity and no interest.

First of all, when our not satisfy us then, we will do the work just for name shake not from whole hearty. when that is happens gradually our mind will go the state of nothingness which causes serious health disorder like mental stresses. For example, researcher says that when the mind is not accepting your then it leads depress syndrome like bipolar syndrome.

Secondly, secure job may gives enough money and protection with the cost of happiness. If, you are not satisfied in your job, then, it takes away you'r joy and glory from you. For example, I am physical therapist and I am interested in the field and medical coding offering me thousands of dollars and more security, it is huge amount when compare to my earning but still, I do not like to do that because seeing patient and interacting with them is happiness for me.

Thirdly, take for example someone is doing software job instead of doing collector work because the company is offering more salary, insurance coverage for the whole families and individual villa for his comfort. But the collector job even though less security still, he earn more respect from people which not possible in that software job. Later in life he feels inferior to others that makes him feeling of inferiority complex. it is true story of my patient's son situation. Today, he is suffering from inferiority complex.

Fourthly, unsatisfied job makes the person less productivity in his entire carrier because it is not his field, we cannot ask the teacher work as a technician because you will get more security. If, see do job in her field then she makes lots of new in teaching like different way of teaching and researching literature. Whereas different field makes her less productivity.

Finally, If we are doing job only for safety and security defiantly we lose our interest in doing the job that happens in most worst case when do not love that job according to some articles.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 2, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
I disagree with this statement which says ...
^^
Line 3, column 108, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: When
...t for name shake not from whole hearty. when that is happens gradually our mind will...
^^^^
Line 3, column 108, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “when” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...t for name shake not from whole hearty. when that is happens gradually our mind will...
^^^^
Line 7, column 272, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'earns'.
Suggestion: earns
...job even though less security still, he earn more respect from people which not poss...
^^^^
Line 7, column 432, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...kes him feeling of inferiority complex. it is true story of my patients son situat...
^^
Line 11, column 123, Rule ID: MOST_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use only 'worst' (without 'most') when you use the superlative.
Suggestion: worst
...terest in doing the job that happens in most worst case when do not love that job accordin...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 123, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'most the worst'.
Suggestion: most the worst
...terest in doing the job that happens in most worst case when do not love that job accordin...
^^^^^^^^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'finally', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'regarding', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'third', 'thirdly', 'whereas', 'for example', 'first of all', 'it is true']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.253521126761 0.229887763892 110% => OK
Verbs: 0.145539906103 0.158761421928 92% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0892018779343 0.0866891130778 103% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0704225352113 0.046263068375 152% => OK
Pronouns: 0.100938967136 0.0685040099705 147% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.119718309859 0.118717715034 101% => OK
Participles: 0.037558685446 0.0351676179071 107% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.59601651116 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0140845070423 0.0309702414327 45% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0446009389671 0.0887237588012 50% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0117370892019 0.0209618222197 56% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0281690140845 0.0139019557991 203% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2266.0 2387.08602151 95% => OK
No of words: 386.0 408.028673835 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.87046632124 5.86048508987 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48200974243 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.323834196891 0.338922669872 96% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.272020725389 0.251872472559 108% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.194300518135 0.174417080927 111% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.116580310881 0.112833075102 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59601651116 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533678756477 0.524397521467 102% => OK
Word variations: 59.4157403021 59.2087087015 100% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6684587814 82% => OK
Sentence length: 22.7058823529 20.5533526081 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.4406864964 48.84282405 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.294117647 120.699889404 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7058823529 20.5533526081 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 0.644075263715 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.5376344086 132% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.54480286738 126% => OK
Readability: 49.9079548918 45.7405998639 109% => OK
Elegance: 1.2962962963 1.45489161554 89% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266474566863 0.300154397459 89% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0890138842884 0.103427244359 86% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.080455965087 0.0752933317313 107% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.55682542482 0.497263757937 112% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.164941367312 0.151897553556 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0987240056707 0.114077575197 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0647392413425 0.0781384742642 83% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.216514696598 0.336927656856 64% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0479479696201 0.067059652881 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164770147579 0.210909579961 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0471202218247 0.0618886996521 76% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8870967742 59% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.86379928315 233% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 6.0 8.42114695341 71% => OK
Negative topic words: 8.0 2.4623655914 325% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.6433691756 110% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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