TPO-27 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.Use specific reasons and ex

In this modern world job is very important without that we cannot survive in this era. Maybe people think that whether we have to important to job security or job satisfaction?. Even, some people feels better when the job gives kind of fulfilment or satisfaction because it makes them feel worthy. But, to run our life we should need some sorts of sources, that is why I strongly with job security rather than satisfaction of it.

First of all, every person in the earth must need job for their basic needs like food, shelter and cloths. How we will get it?. So, in order to satisfy above mentioned stuff, initially, at least we need a job than it's satisfaction. Imagine that we are born in the poor middle class with five sibling and your the elder one. Then, you are the one who have to take all responsibilities of a family. For example, I am the eldest son in my family, now I am paying tuition fee for my brother and sister every semester with my restaurant job even though I am not happy with that job which I do everyday, all, because for my family. May be people get inner happiness when find the job they want.

Secondly, to obtain some education we need fund that we can get through secure job because this kind of job always help us to get the loan from the bank. For example, a friend of mine got job as physical therapist in army hospital which is secure until his death he does not want work with soldiers those who are deeply wounded physically as well mentally which he dislikes or not satisfied with his job. But, same organisation gave long leave and paid salary with cost bearing for his higher study in master of physical therapy. He could not achieved this without his secure job. Satisfaction it is all how you feel it.

Thirdly, to be a respectful person in this society you need secure job, no matter whether it gives happiness or not. Usually, in village side if we are roaming simply, people will start saying see he is waste fellow for his family and he destroy the family dignity. Further, public shall say who will ready give girl for boy who is not having secure job and they it will be risky to give the girl for such kind of person. Sometimes, job satisfaction make you to feel-worthy to this task. In certain situation compromise is must and you cannot avoid it.

To conclude, in order to reach our goal, to support our family and to be a respectful person in this society we must do secure job whether you like it or not.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 589, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...I am not happy with that job which I do everyday, all, because for my family. May be peo...
^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 544, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'achieve'
Suggestion: achieve
...aster of physical therapy. He could not achieved this without his secure job. Satisfacti...
^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 9, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...it is all how you feel it. Thirdly, to be a respectful person in this societ...
^^
Line 9, column 240, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'destroys'.
Suggestion: destroys
...e is waste fellow for his family and he destroy the family dignity. Further, public sha...
^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 160, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... secure job whether you like it or not.
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, well, at least, for example, kind of, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2018.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 454.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.4449339207 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36766006887 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508810572687 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 632.7 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.5712073911 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.7272727273 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6363636364 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22727272727 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277623683766 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0907287199153 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0487061321261 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16672376382 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0287871047401 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.47 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.99 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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