Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents today are more involved in their children’s education than were parents in the past.
Nowadays, in this sophisticated world, education plays a salient role in children’s life since it leads children to climb the ladder of success in the future. In this regard, some people believe that these days, parents are more involved in children’s education. However, others hold an opposite viewpoint, and they are on the opinion that in the past, mothers and fathers cared more about their children’s education. From my perspective, I concur with the former group, and in what follows, I will elaborate on the most outstanding reasons.
First and foremost, as parents, nowadays, are more knowledgeable, they become more involved in their children’s education. In the past, most of the parents cannot read and write, so that if their children asked a question related to their lesson, parents could not answer it accurately. In contrast, today, most parents are educated and achieved a graduate degree from a university. In this line of thought, should children ask a question about their math or science lesson, their parents will teach them how to solve their problems since parents are familiar with the course that children are learning. For instance, when I was a teenage girl, I asked most of my math problems from my fathers, who is an engineer, and I solved my science issues with my mother’s assistance, who is a physician. However, if my parents cannot respond to my problems, they were surfing the web to discover a propitious solution because they are educated. It demonstrates, parents today are more engaged in their children’s schoolwork.
Secondly, as children’s close family becomes involved in their children’s education, they are encouraging them more than the past. The last generation's parents stimulate their children to work with them as a farmer, or a shepherd because they thought it is more wealthy as they will learn a task to exploit it in the future as a job. On the other hand, nowadays, boys and girls are motivated by their parents to enhance their education, providing they are seeking to have an excellent job opportunity. Hence, as technology is progressing, society requires a more educated generation than before, so parents involve themselves in their children’s education to help them boost their knowledge. For example, when I was seven, my mother encourages me to be a physician, so she bought some doctors and surgery toys for me. After that, I desired to be a doctor and tried hard to catch my goal. If my parents had not involved themselves in encouraging me to be a doctor, I would not have become a doctor now.
To wrap it up, having all the aforementioned reasons into account, I do believe that nowadays parents are more involved in their sons' and daughters’ education. Not only do parents become more knowledgable to help their children, and solve their schoolwork issues, but they also encourage children to attain a high level of education.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, in contrast, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2439.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 483.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04968944099 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90906699211 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47619047619 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 747.0 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8984648827 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.95 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.15 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.85 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.402736017894 0.236089414692 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.149843812821 0.076458572812 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0937920308157 0.0737576698707 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.27531301249 0.150856017488 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0430099073771 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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