TPO 30 - Do you agree or disagree? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours.
Working is one of the bold parts of our lives. When you seek a job, there are many factors that you may consider, such as salary and work hours. One aspect that we should consider is how enjoyable this work is because we should for many years, and if we cannot enjoy it, we will be gloomy after a few years. There are several reasons, two of which are great importance, which is elaborated hereunder.
First, you can use your free days for short trips and recovery yourself. It Is disappointing that you work for the whole year without any rest. Most of the employees only go on a trip once or twice a year, and the rest of the day, they can't go on a trip. If you have to work five days a week for a shorter amount of hours, it is hard to use the rest of the day for deep recovery. But if you have a whole day, you can plan a trip and enjoy your time. For instance, if I had an option to choose working three days a week, I managed to travel more, which would help me be more joyful than now. I have only two days of the weekend, and I use it for cleaning, lying down, and talking to some friends. I can go on trips only in summer and only one per year.
Moreover, it will help you to improve your skills by participating in seminars and workshops. Nowadays, It is really important to be up-to-date and improve your skill and knowledge every day. One way to do so is by attending workshops. Most of these workshops take a whole long day. So it is tough to find free time to attend these seminars. For example, my brother used his whole weekend for almost a year to improve his coding skill to raise his salary.
To sum up, it is more enjoyable to work only three days a week because you can use your free time to travel, enjoy yourself, and invest in yourself to be better in your field. I personally wish someday I could use this option.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 236, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...e a year, and the rest of the day, they cant go on a trip. If you have to work five ...
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Line 2, column 493, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to work'.
Suggestion: to work
... instance, if I had an option to choose working three days a week, I managed to travel ...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 752, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s only in summer and only one per year. Moreover, it will help you to improve yo...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, moreover, really, so, for example, for instance, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1483.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 359.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.13091922006 4.8611393121 85% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.24682849754 2.67179642975 84% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.504178272981 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 467.1 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.6717400713 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.15 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.95 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.393468373647 0.236089414692 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116936585334 0.076458572812 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105669077632 0.0737576698707 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21258514904 0.150856017488 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112745066084 0.0645574589148 175% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.0 11.7677419355 59% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 79.6 58.1214874552 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.38 10.9000537634 59% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.55 8.01818996416 82% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 86.8835125448 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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