TPO-30 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use spec

With the ever changing economy, people are forced to work for longer hours. Cut throat competition virtually in every filed and lack of down time are primary reasons for increasing stress levels. Simple pleasures of life are becoming rare, not because of change in life choices but because scarcity of time for ourselves or for loved ones. But, that being said, individuals with multi skills are in huge demand with better prospects. I believe, working for three days for longer duration is better than working five days for shorter time because of flexibility and extra time on hand to pursue interests.

First, working for three days a week will give flexibility for working individuals and for their families especially for families with young kids. To support the increasing needs both husband and wife need to work. Longer working hours mean less time with families. The option to work for three days will be highly beneficial. Either or both parents will get time to spend with their kids. My mom and dad planned their work schedules so they can spend enough time at home. Me and my sister loved to do various activities with both of them together. We have fond memories of going on vacations, to museums, and to beaches.

Also, with three days working week there will be time on hand to pursue hobby. Professionals can invest the extra time to gain and master new skills in their fields. Current skill sets highly sought after in the job market. Hobbies are stress busters. One of my colleague loves to cook. She and her husband plan their date nights to learn new cuisines at local culinary schools. She told me secret to her happy marriage is to incorporate their interests together. Sometimes she gets to pick and sometimes her husband gets to choose the activity.

To sum up, these are the reasons, I prefer to work for three days and enjoy the rest of the week with my family and friends, to keep myself up to date on current technology and skills, also to pursue my hobbies to recharge for the coming busy work schedule.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...er husband gets to choose the activity. To sum up, these are the reasons, I pref...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 11.0286738351 9% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1688.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 355.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75492957746 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33128843618 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532394366197 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 509.4 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.6207309715 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.7272727273 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1363636364 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.59090909091 5.45110844103 29% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270151353702 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0759519195806 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0822972479947 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17173327095 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0608808464478 0.0645574589148 94% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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