TPO-30 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use spec

When comes to job working hours are important factor which decide your enjoyment in the particular job. Some people may think it is healthy to do less working to maintain everything in balance such family and job and so on. But, I strongly agree the statement which state working more and getting huge rest is enjoyable job in my point of view. To support my position I want to reason out advantages of having more rest time.

To begin with, family always need our presence without us they do not want anything. Because working persons are more crucial member in the family, whatever function it may be they always wait for us start the function. For example, a friend of my father was working in Delhi, the company he worked did not give one day extra off because of that he could not attend his daughter function. Just only for him they post-pond the function at week end. If he might have the chance three days work he need not struggled this much is not it?. Some people like even someone else take the responsibility in his place.

In addition, we can enjoy vacation as well the job if you are working half week in workplace and rest in the joy trips. Imagine that you are working in big factory where thousands employees are working there. We always have the stress due to the job, in order get rid out of it, we should have long rest period to refresh ourselves. Otherwise we will end up with psychological disorder like bipolar syndrome, depression and anxiety. Fewer person thinks that working longtime not good for health and makes monotonous life style.

Finally, new ideas are possible when we are working in long working time followed by vast rest period. That stimulate our brain to come out the creative ideas and solution for the problems. For example, In Dell company they did the same think to employees and they found out that staffs can work efficiently and innovative way that brought large profit for the employer at the sametime staff also felt-their works are joyful rather than pressure. Others point of view, they may think work consistence there then worker feels happy about the job.

To conclude, in order to balance the family and job, to escape from stressful life and to have joy and prosperity all workers must work for only three days rather working for five days which is horrible. Do hard work as well enjoy limitless in you life.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
When comes to job working hours are importan...
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Line 4, column 170, Rule ID: MAY_BE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'maybe' (=perhaps)?
Suggestion: maybe
...ber in the family, whatever function it may be they always wait for us start the funct...
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Line 4, column 572, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[4]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'takes'.
Suggestion: takes
...it?. Some people like even someone else take the responsibility in his place. ...
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Line 8, column 301, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'rested'.
Suggestion: rested
... get rid out of it, we should have long rest period to refresh ourselves. Otherwise ...
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Line 8, column 335, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Otherwise,
... long rest period to refresh ourselves. Otherwise we will end up with psychological disor...
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Line 14, column 255, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rk as well enjoy limitless in you life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, may, so, then, well, even so, for example, in addition, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1969.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6880952381 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30336808503 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557142857143 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.7797463781 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.7619047619 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42857142857 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.393154891886 0.236089414692 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112849572882 0.076458572812 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0676613648493 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227806889846 0.150856017488 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0676646386917 0.0645574589148 105% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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