Education plays an important role in everyone's life. Parents are trying to improve their children education by different methods. Some of them giving money to their children to encourage them to get high grades. While others consider giving money to children is bribe and not feasible way. This issue arouses much controversy among different parents and I is no exception. In my opinion. i subscribe to the former one for the following reasons I will illustrate them in my essay.
First of all, giving children monetary reward will encourage them to strive constantly to get high grades and do better in school. Children will do their best to get this reward. In addition, children will love going to their school and paying attention to their teacher to get all the information they need to get high grades. Children will put their study on the top of their daily duties list to get this monetary reward. According to recent survey conducted in Sweden university and published 2015 stated that children who are getting monetary and tangible reward are more likely to get high scores in their school and eager to listen to their teacher in their class. For example, my seven years old son used to get bad grades in kindergarten stage and i tried different methods with him to get him to do better in school such as hanging out together to an amusement park or going to the park. Yet, all this trials turn out not feasible. However, in his second grade, I started to give him 5$ every time gets high grade . Since then, he always gets high grades and doing well in his school. This example illustrated the importance of giving children money to improve their scholastic performance.
Secondly reward students with money make them learn a lot of valuable things in their life as well as realize the value of money in the future. Students will learn how to be responsible, how to manage their money, and saving habit. The more money that children get, the more they value it. For example, whenever my son got high grades, i give him money as reward. He start to save up this money to buy things that he needs the most such as book or buy his favourite toy. Since then, my son get used to save money and become responsible for his personal needs. According to remarkable study done in Cairo university showed that 60% of students who are getting monetary reward from their parents are more likely to seek a job when they grow up to be financially independent. As you can see giving children money as a reward teach them to be independent and responsible.
To put in a nutshell, rewarding children with monet not only encourage students to get high grades, but also it will teach them to valuable things in their life. We should all encourage our children to do well in their school.
Essay evaluation report
not feasible way.
not a feasible way.
rewarding children with monet not only encourage students to get high grades, but also it will teach them to valuable things in their life.
Description: 'Not only...but also' is not used properly. can you re-write this sentence?
Sentence: To put in a nutshell, rewarding children with monet not only encourage students to get high grades, but also it will teach them to valuable things in their life.
Error: monet Suggestion: No alternate word
flaws:
No. of Words: 491 while No. of Different Words: 213
Don't give two survey/study in one essay.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 20 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 491 350
No. of Characters: 2241 1500
No. of Different Words: 213 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.707 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.564 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.385 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 148 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 94 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.885 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.545 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.316 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.459 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.203 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 390, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: I
...s and I is no exception. In my opinion. i subscribe to the former one for the fol...
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Line 1, column 390, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...s and I is no exception. In my opinion. i subscribe to the former one for the fol...
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Line 3, column 758, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...et bad grades in kindergarten stage and i tried different methods with him to ge...
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Line 3, column 792, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e and i tried different methods with him to get him to do better in school such a...
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Line 3, column 996, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$5'.
Suggestion: $5
...his second grade, I started to give him 5$ every time gets high grade . Since then...
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Line 3, column 1025, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...o give him 5$ every time gets high grade . Since then, he always gets high grades ...
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Line 5, column 337, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ample, whenever my son got high grades, i give him money as reward. He start to s...
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Line 5, column 368, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'starts'.
Suggestion: starts
... grades, i give him money as reward. He start to save up this money to buy things tha...
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Line 5, column 814, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... As you can see giving children money as a reward teach them to be independent an...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'then', 'well', 'while', 'for example', 'in addition', 'such as', 'as well as', 'first of all', 'in my opinion']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.226168224299 0.229887763892 98% => OK
Verbs: 0.170093457944 0.158761421928 107% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0971962616822 0.0866891130778 112% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0411214953271 0.046263068375 89% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0934579439252 0.0685040099705 136% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.0915887850467 0.118717715034 77% => OK
Participles: 0.0373831775701 0.0351676179071 106% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.44410717002 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0710280373832 0.0309702414327 229% => Less infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.00747663551402 0.00188951952338 396% => OK
Determiners: 0.0523364485981 0.0887237588012 59% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0168224299065 0.0209618222197 80% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.011214953271 0.0139019557991 81% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2789.0 2387.08602151 117% => OK
No of words: 492.0 408.028673835 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.66869918699 5.86048508987 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70967865282 4.48200974243 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.313008130081 0.338922669872 92% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.213414634146 0.251872472559 85% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.158536585366 0.174417080927 91% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0873983739837 0.112833075102 77% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44410717002 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.447154471545 0.524397521467 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 50.7731428041 59.2087087015 86% => OK
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6684587814 131% => OK
Sentence length: 18.2222222222 20.5533526081 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.9564985716 48.84282405 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.296296296 120.699889404 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2222222222 20.5533526081 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.62962962963 0.644075263715 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.54480286738 162% => OK
Readability: 39.5636856369 45.7405998639 86% => OK
Elegance: 1.16564417178 1.45489161554 80% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317361885558 0.300154397459 106% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.131289463361 0.103427244359 127% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0854217071497 0.0752933317313 113% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.462836225201 0.497263757937 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.172067884121 0.151897553556 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121195028094 0.114077575197 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0574838986461 0.0781384742642 74% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.453548159988 0.336927656856 135% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.109914213666 0.067059652881 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229856277832 0.210909579961 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0489950054365 0.0618886996521 79% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 11.8870967742 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.91756272401 81% => OK
Positive topic words: 21.0 8.42114695341 249% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 24.0 13.6433691756 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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