TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things related to schoolwork.
There are many people who are afraid of trying new things because they are not brave enough for problems and difficulties that they might be facing, so they prefer to move forward on their routine and constant life with only one job. personally, I believe that trying new things would be a great inspiration to have a challengeable life. To be more specific, I will explain my reasons in the following paragraphs.
The main reason for my view is that trying new things makes people find their talents in various fields. most of the people are not even aware of their abilities, so they do the same routine every day without making an effort to do something new. this is because they are scared that they might lose their current jobs and opportunities, and this is somehow reasonable since most of them have responsibilities and families need to take care of, as a result, they rather have a permanent life. I had a friend for instance, who was a manager in a company and she had a great salary. even though everything was good and normal, she always felt that something is missing in her life, so I motivated her to go after painting courses which she adored when she was young but did not continue it because she thought that maybe she isn’t talented enough; however, that wasn’t true as she didn’t have enough time to concentrate on painting. Thus, she started painting again and after a year she became one of the greatest painters, and now has her own gallery of paintings.
another reason why I agree with the above statement is that trying assorted things makes life more interesting and exciting because people are going to have new experiences with different people in new places, and that makes them more motivated and eager to chase after their goals. my personal experience is a compelling example of this. I always wanted to learn another language, but I hesitated whether I can make it or not and I was thinking about it for a long time till I finally decided to start learning Germany which I was completely unfamiliar with. In the very beginning the language was so hard; therefore, I had to study a lot but after a while it became so lovely and enjoyable. learning the german language overwhelming as it was a completely new experience with new people, and the most interesting part was our native german teachers who I adored the most since they were so helpful and kind, besides, their native accent made them more appealing. Moreover, I found many incredible friends in the institute who became my best friends.
To sum up, according to those reasons that I stated above I agree that trying new things and taking risks would be great because we can learn and different things that can help us in life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, finally, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 73.0 43.0788530466 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2276.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 482.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72199170124 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59596218096 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48755186722 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 716.4 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 87.1797487594 48.9658058833 178% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.25 100.406767564 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.125 20.6045352989 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.1875 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111943108088 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0373192632345 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0331255358585 0.0737576698707 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0603709929085 0.150856017488 40% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0363705420782 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.69 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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