TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th

Nowadays, psychologists emphasize on strong relationship between parents and children. As parents are busier and have limited time, there is a hot debate about the most efficient way of using time to be a good parents. Although some people may think that parenting is all about teaching new skills and help the children to do their assignments, in my view, playing with our sons and daughters is more effective.

The foremost reason why I am supporting this idea lies in the fact that kids need friends not mentors. Childhood is a very dangerous stage of growing and children prefer to spend their time with somebody who get along with them. If parents want to teach their children and act like supervisors, they will not trust them to tell them their mistakes because they are afraid of blaming. Therefore, mothers and fathers should create a cordiality which allows their child confide freely.

Another subtle point that I should deem is that we should consider social success as important as education success. For example, if parents invest on one aspect of offspring’s life, later when they enter to society, they will not communicate in a good manner with people. Then they do not have happy marriage or make divorce which increase the rate of depression and suicide. That is exactly the difference between IQ and EQ which scientists try to convey people. It means that healthy children need to play and have fun to understand how cooperate in real life. Hence, if parents play with them and train them to share their toys, they get that in future it is vital to share their idea in a group to assist others.

Admittedly, there are some advantages of working on school homework that we cannot ignore. The grades of those students whose parents helped them to do their assignments are significantly higher than control groups who study alone. Nevertheless, this concern can be eliminated if we allow students to study with their friends and collaborate.

Due to aforementioned argument explored in previous statements, the first responsibility of parents is to protect children then provide an excellent environment for them to speak frankly and fearlessly which is essential for their mental health and success in society.

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Average: 8 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, frankly, hence, if, may, nevertheless, so, then, therefore, for example, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1876.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04301075269 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72186943946 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588709677419 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 559.8 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.0884559298 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.352941176 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8823529412 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.29411764706 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23475571857 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0691624866962 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0609506891875 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124996306399 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0764421043661 0.0645574589148 118% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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