TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th

To be honest today's parents they couldn't find out the time to spend with their kids because of their hectic schedule. Earlier only men used to work and female takes care house hold activities but now both of them equally working for their betterment and that becomes very necessary for everyone's life. In this situation when parents find some time then either they can spend in their kid's school works or they can play with their children like cycling, basket ball and so on.

First of all, I want to support that parents if they find out some time, the sports is best activities for both the parents and the children because kids are already having many home works to do which is given by the school, so kids spending more time in study than any sports activities that is not fair for the young children. So, parents must spend their spare time in games activities that improve their parents health as well as kid's health, both of them can be very fit for their daily activities.

Further, encouraging the kids in studying activities will stress very badly. For example, in school kids are studying somewhere around eight hours a day, further, when push them study then, they will become easily fatigue which eventually leads physical and mental distress to the children due to overwork load. One, article says that because of excessive strain to the kids they creativity reduced lot when compare 20 years before.

Moreover, playing sports will make you feel more better that will helps the children to concentrate on their study and they can do the task within less period of time due to the refresh mind set up, they can easily get things into their mind which boost them to be creative. That amazing event every children must get that opportunity without failing.

Finally, even though study gives the better knowledge and wisdom without physical fitness it does not have any value on earth. Play is basic of inventions and creativity so in order to kids become a healthy and creative person parents we are supposed spend our free time with kids on focus on sports.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 34, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
To be honest todays parents they couldnt find out the time to spend with their k...
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Line 4, column 85, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'is the best'.
Suggestion: is the best
... if they find out some time, the sports is best activities for both the parents and the...
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Line 10, column 45, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
...over, playing sports will make you feel more better that will helps the children to concen...
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Line 10, column 85, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...more better that will helps the children to concentrate on their study and they c...
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Line 10, column 154, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...dy and they can do the task within less period of time due to the refresh mind set up, they ca...
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Line 10, column 176, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... task within less period of time due to the refresh mind set up, they can easily get things...
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Line 13, column 302, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...free time with kids on focus on sports.
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'finally', 'first', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'then', 'well', 'for example', 'as well as', 'first of all']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.239690721649 0.229887763892 104% => OK
Verbs: 0.154639175258 0.158761421928 97% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0773195876289 0.0866891130778 89% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0798969072165 0.046263068375 173% => OK
Pronouns: 0.069587628866 0.0685040099705 102% => OK
Prepositions: 0.118556701031 0.118717715034 100% => OK
Participles: 0.0283505154639 0.0351676179071 81% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.16385516293 2.67179642975 81% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0309278350515 0.0309702414327 100% => OK
Particles: 0.00515463917526 0.00188951952338 273% => OK
Determiners: 0.0670103092784 0.0887237588012 76% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0283505154639 0.0209618222197 135% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0231958762887 0.0139019557991 167% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2095.0 2387.08602151 88% => OK
No of words: 361.0 408.028673835 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.80332409972 5.86048508987 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.48200974243 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.299168975069 0.338922669872 88% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.213296398892 0.251872472559 85% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.12188365651 0.174417080927 70% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0664819944598 0.112833075102 59% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.16385516293 2.67179642975 81% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540166204986 0.524397521467 103% => OK
Word variations: 59.2036383721 59.2087087015 100% => OK
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6684587814 58% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0833333333 20.5533526081 146% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.7523540114 48.84282405 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 174.583333333 120.699889404 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.0833333333 20.5533526081 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.916666666667 0.644075263715 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.54480286738 126% => OK
Readability: 51.4129732225 45.7405998639 112% => OK
Elegance: 1.27118644068 1.45489161554 87% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.369670764999 0.300154397459 123% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.122609821869 0.103427244359 119% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0572545601299 0.0752933317313 76% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.622021898257 0.497263757937 125% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.148345342985 0.151897553556 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.154145283897 0.114077575197 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0833028725225 0.0781384742642 107% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.282846347937 0.336927656856 84% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.107141761033 0.067059652881 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229469823277 0.210909579961 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0733516836659 0.0618886996521 119% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8870967742 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.91756272401 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 9.0 8.42114695341 107% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.75985663082 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 11.0 13.6433691756 81% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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