Nowadays life is very frenetic, and in the majority of the families both parents have a full-time job, as a consequence of this, they do not have much time to spend with their children. According to this, I believe that is very important for children to spend time with their parents as soon as it is possible. Therefore, I think that the families have to use their time to play game and sports together.
First, playing a game is as much educational as doing homework together. During the week-work children go to school every day and they do their homework before they parents are back home, because this is their daily basis duties. I remember when I was a child, I used to do my homework as soon I finished lunch, in this way I could be free of duties when my dad was back from work, and then we could play together or watch a cartoon on TV together, before the dinner was ready, it was the best moment of the day. I believe is the same for most of the other children, they want to have fun with his or her mum and dad after a day spent at school and doing homework, they are not expecting to do things related to schoolwork.
Second, doing sport is a healthy activity for all the family and is an opportunity to spend time outdoors, the parents can take the load of the workweek off and children can enjoy having fun with friends that usually they do not meet at school. It is very important to do things completely different from the routine, when parents are more relaxed and children happy, the quality of the time spent together is higher, and this is very important when the parents are very busy and have no much time available. I do not think that both parents and children would be happy to spend the weekend at home studying or doing school stuff, it is just boring. I have summer memory back when I was little, the weekends were the moment that I was expecting all week long because it was the time when we could finally go to the beach together, play beach tennis, swimming and meet my holiday friends.
I conclusion, based on my child experience who had both parents working full-time, the best way for parents to spend high-quality time with their children is to do something fun like games and sports together, and different from their daily basis activities, this is what I always waited for from my parents when I was a child.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 166, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'parent'
Suggestion: parent
... and they do their homework before they parents are back home, because this is their da...
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Line 5, column 486, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...when the parents are very busy and have no much time available. I do not think tha...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...wimming and meet my holiday friends. I conclusion, based on my child experienc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, second, so, then, therefore, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 15.1003584229 192% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1925.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 434.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.43548387097 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37907326373 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.421658986175 0.524837075471 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 586.8 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 20.1344086022 179% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.9511447504 48.9658058833 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 160.416666667 100.406767564 160% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.1666666667 20.6045352989 176% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.411001306718 0.236089414692 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.182849707016 0.076458572812 239% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0731345809554 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.288136829664 0.150856017488 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0806324126469 0.0645574589148 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 11.7677419355 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.86 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.06 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.4 10.0537634409 163% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 10.247311828 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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