When it comes to issue that whether younger people are more affected by famous charactres or older people are impressed by them more, some believe that younger people are more affected by celebrities' opinion, while others have the opposite view. As far as I concerned, in my own view, the former idea carries more weight. I take this position on account for the following reasons.
First and most important reason is that younger people are in a period of their life in which the are liikong for some characters as a unique hero or symbol with special properties in their life. A small example can give light on this matter. When a teenage is faced with multiple belives about religon or something like this, want to know about the opinion of that the most famous people and celebrities to obey. . However, this influences can be both negative or positive, because non of celebrities are mistake proof. As it can be seen younger people are more affected by famous characters.
A further noteworthy reason we must consider is that, younger people are looking for a field of activity or in their life to spend remaining years of life with it. when the young people face with a wide range of jobs, study major, etc, they want to know that the famous people and celebrities suggestions. thus automatically get affected by these celebrities. For instance, when a highschool student want to choose a major for continuing his/her study and the following job, in addition to his/her own talent, unique skills, and abilities, he/she will search definitly between the famous and successfull people to see the consiquences of their choices. But older people are not involved in or struggling with these kined of choices. Therefore younger people are more affected by celebreties.
In sum up, when we are thinking about the famous entertainers or athletes and even some soccessfull scientists all over the world, we should accept that younger are most capable of being affected by them, because they are looking for hero to shape their character accordingly, and they are exposed to making some vital choices for their future. This is why famouse people or celebrities have a heavy duty for their own socity, because they are the symbols o their people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, first, however, if, look, so, therefore, thus, while, even so, for instance, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1872.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 380.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92631578947 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5907173784 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502631578947 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 594.0 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 11.0 3.51792114695 313% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 88.2127222967 48.9658058833 180% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.0 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.75 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.625 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213930390102 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0798458991983 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0514567224572 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14259337059 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0314301815546 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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