TPO-46 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.Use specific reasons and exam
No one can cast a shadow of doubt on the fact that celebrities, such as famous entertainer and athletes have the pivotal role in the modern era. They could be a pattern for the people life in any society. It widely accepted that celebrities influence both young people and older people. Some people may hold the view that celebrities are more important to the young generation. However, some other may take an opposite viewpoint and belief that celebrities are more important to older people. I personally believe that stars are the more effect on the young generation. In what follows, I will illuminate my opinion through two noticeable reasons.
The first prominent reason is that young generation is seeking their favorite characters and like to behave like them. They are following actors or athletes as well as singers. They get more information in their life as well as ability in order to they attempt that improve their skill. I would like to take a personal experience as an example. When I was younger, I played soccer. My favorite player was Ronaldo, a young and famous player from Braziel. Her play was amazing, so I consider her as someone I can learn from him. However, my parent just cannot understand why I am so attracted by him.
Furthermore, another reason which deserves some words here that due to the improvement of technology and the internet, the news about celebrities very easily spread on the websites. Younger people more use the internet than older people. For instance, when young people are using a computer or cell phone, they will encounter all kind of news about celebrities from all fields include supports, entertainment, and science. Although older people use the internet, they are less than spend time in the social network such as Instagram, so they have less information about celebrities. It is vividly clear that the young people get more information about celebrities, so the more spend time in the social network, the more possible to be affected by the celebrities.
All in all, I firmly believe that celebrities always has one of the most vital roles of people lifestyle. It is hard to disguise the fact that celebrities are important to older people that should not be ignored, but celebrities could be a lot more important for too many reasons two of which I mentioned above. Therefore, I believe that young people more than older people affected by celebrities
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, for instance, kind of, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2007.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91911764706 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7122055541 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475490196078 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 642.6 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.7859515387 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.2608695652 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7391304348 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.60869565217 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236130315505 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.073509799383 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0617866017497 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14694374734 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.046545276297 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.96 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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