With the advent of modern technology, our life has changed dramatically from past few decades. It is a controversial question whether in today's world youngsters should more systematic or not. In my opinion, it is very important to be organized in twenty-first century. I feel this way for two salient reasons which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, with the increase in population, unemployment rate has increased rapidly. In such scenario, youths should plan their career very carefully, because the choices they will make today, definitely, render the outcome in the future days. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I was in the high school, I started exploring the subjects of my interest and their demand in the future jobs. After survey many points, I chose to take science as my major subject. During university, I worked hard in my studies to become excel student as well started doing volunteer teaching at the local elementary school. This decision was the keystone of my life spasm. After graduation, I got many jobs offers from different schools, because of my previous mentor experience which stand me out from other people. In this way, my extra effort apart from studies, helped me to get a job as a teacher, so careful planning boosts your knowledge and key to get a secure job.
Secondly, with the increase in social status and inflation, many times one job can not help you to get luxurious life. Individuals are putting extra effort in order to get their dream house, car and other things. Indeed, we are living in a materialistic world where you need to bolster yourself to fulfill the dreams. In such case, if you are well organized and productive person, then you can earn the way you want, otherwise it might be a difficult situation. My brother's experience is an evidence of what I mean. After university, He was worked as a computer science engineer, but also wanted to start his own business. He shared this proposal with his friends, who were already in the business. They agreed to be partner because they were known to my brother's work-efficiency and organized nature from college days. Eventually, they started lucrative online computer selling business and now this business is the substantial source of my big brother's income. Although, it is very hectic and tiresome work, yet he is able to handle it properly. So, ability to be organised is the impetus reason of your success.
In the last, I strongly believe that to survive in this fierce competition of today's world and to become financially secure, the key points are, ability to organize and plan which cause productivity and prosperity in your life
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...productivity and prosperity in your life
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, well, apart from, i feel, i mean, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2245.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 455.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93406593407 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75351725319 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569230769231 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 707.4 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.4218554745 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.8 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.88 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12281802545 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0320353280325 0.076458572812 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0286948552629 0.0737576698707 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0797648596792 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0175289835647 0.0645574589148 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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