TPO-48 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.

Some people prefer to do not organize to advance their activities because they think that this lead to reduce their freedom, whereas I strongly agree with the statement, planning your daily activities is critical in order to get all the important things done at the end of the day.

First of all, the organization is very important in every situation, but in modern life, it is becoming critical if you want to carry on all your duty and find some time for leisure activities. For example, when I was in secondary school, my mother used to prepare my backpack, food, and a shirt and trousers for the next day of school, the night before. This is because, in the mornings she had to do so many other things such as prepare breakfast, tiding up the house. This is because she worked until late during that period and she wanted to give sometimes for reading and relax. If she was not so well-organized, she would have never found time for herself and at the same time have the house tided up. furthermore, I never arrived late at school, never I missed the food. She is the perfect example of organization for me.

Second, the ability to plan is also very important for students, because they have a very complex life; they have to attend classes, do practical activities and studying for the exams, in a very short period of time, if they are not well organized, they will sure lag behind those instead have planned carefully their daily activities. In my experience, when I was a university student, I began organizing very carefully all my activities, when during the first semester, I had very low scores in my major. that period I was not so focused on classes, and I did precisely plan my studies, and this led me to get very low scores even I thought I was prepared, this is because I was not using my time efficiently. In the second semester, I began to plan and organize my day, with the results that my scores were much higher than before.

In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, I do believe that organization and planning are essential most of the time. In particular, nowadays which our lives are always busier and out lives are frenetic and complex. A good daily plan is the key to arrive at the end of the day and get all your duty done, it does not matter if you are a parent or a student.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 547, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'sometimes' is usually put before the verb 'give'.
Suggestion: sometimes give
...te during that period and she wanted to give sometimes for reading and relax. If she was not s...
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Line 5, column 202, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...studying for the exams, in a very short period of time, if they are not well organized, they w...
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Line 5, column 508, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: That
...ter, I had very low scores in my major. that period I was not so focused on classes,...
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Line 7, column 125, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...lanning are essential most of the time. In particular, nowadays which our lives ar...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, second, so, well, whereas, for example, in conclusion, in particular, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1901.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 421.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.51543942993 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5395578885 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479809976247 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 620.1 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.4293311059 48.9658058833 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.733333333 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0666666667 20.6045352989 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.4 5.45110844103 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217834397104 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0693157641841 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0548191012895 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131104674875 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0214168486559 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.002688172 185% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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