TPO-50 - Independent Writing Task

Nowadays, with advancement of technology, students can search for all topics especially the history of the kingdom and countries, but some people think all universities should have history courses, but I really disagree. In my opinion, it’s should be voluntary topic and students decide themselves whether they would like to take it or not.

First, in all universities, they have international students that, don’t know about the host country history and if their major is not same as history the university must not force them to take this course. For example, I remember our family traveled to a lot of countries and I had to take my high school in Iran for 3 years. Except of their culture and government rules like as forcing us to wear hijab, I had to study all their history courses and that was awful time I’ve ever had.

Second, it has some advantages too, when students read history books, they will understand how many risks the king took or how many problems in in their culture was, and how the modernity and development of technology changed lives. For example, when I read the British history from England, they forced a 17-year-old lady to be a queen and that was ridiculous that all her uncles and paternal families tricked her to get her place for themselves, or when she fell in love with her consulted, he was old and her reason was, he just helped her and these reasons are funny for adult people of 21 centuries, but at that time, was a big fact of their lives.on the other hand, it has more interesting for all ages to watching historical movies than studying, because most of the people do not enjoy studying but, it's a great hobby for people in the world. I remember, the satellite television programs showed, Hurram sultan movie, her life to how be the wife of the Turkish kingdom, that showed her as a wonderful and powerful person in her own life and how she absorbed people to followed her as a queen.

Third,reading history also has its own merits ... Students, if they read it, will remain in their minds. For example, they learn to avoid the mistakes of the past. for example, Saudi politicians have learned that no matter how much the people are stopped and limited, they can not stop the internet and technology. So they concluded that they would give more work to the people, including women, in the community.

In conclusion, it is hard to know about history like as forcing courses in school or universities, but, when people read these books like as a novel or watching in Hollywood. I hope my examples have sufficiently expressed my opinion.

Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 142, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: in
...isks the king took or how many problems in in their culture was, and how the modernit...
Line 5, column 809, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...f the people do not enjoy studying but, its a great hobby for people in the world. ...
Line 5, column 905, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
...he satellite television programs showed, Hurram sultan movie, her life to how be ...
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , reading
...e to followed her as a queen. Third,reading history also has its own merits ... Stu...
Line 8, column 165, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: For
...earn to avoid the mistakes of the past. for example, Saudi politicians have learned...

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, second, so, third, as for, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2155.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 453.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75717439294 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60803462254 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525386313466 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 663.3 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 136.072627666 48.9658058833 278% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 143.666666667 100.406767564 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.2 20.6045352989 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.8 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 11.7677419355 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.92 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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