TPO 6:
Life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children.
Views differs when it comes to the convenience of life throughout the time. Some people are inclined toward the idea that life is easier today compare to the past. However, others may take an opposite view point and believe that life was more comfortable when our grandparents were children. In my perspective, life in the present day is easier that it was when our grandparents were juvenlies. I will pinpoint the most outstanding reasons in the following paragraphs.
The first point worth mentioning is that the developement of technology provide us great facilities which make our life easy. The advancement of the technology causes emerge of many new devices for people such as faster transportation system. In the old day, automobiles was really slow which consume time of people going to travel. But, there are many fast transportation options for people like airplance that will arrive to their destinations faster than before. Therefore, the people will not get tired because of the long route. Moreover, people do not stuck in traffic since there are subways and bycicle which used by people. The number of routs were few in the past and because of that many people were annoyed by the traffic. Nowadays, any countries in the world have subway system which is cheaper than other vehicle device and do not have traffic. Therefore, people are not force to to use cars to stuck at traffic.
The more subtle reason is that the economic and societies improved which endenger suitable conditions for people to be more healthy. In the old days, there was war in our country and because of that there was shortage of food and medicine supplies. Nowadays, our country are developed and there are many medicines which can be bought by anyone. Also, our government helps people who do not have money to treat themself. There are many dangarous deceases like cancer which the price of its treatment are very high and plenty number of people can not afford it. In the past, a person who gets it was obliged to die, but today our scocieties will treats this person for free. Moreover, because of our developed societies the health of people are enhanced compare to the past. For example, the average age of the people who live in these days are 15 times higher than past.
To make a long story short, based on the aforementioned argumet, the life situation in present days have make the life of people more better than then when our grandprents where children. Therefore, there are numerous benefits for people to have a complete life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 891, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: to
...raffic. Therefore, people are not force to to use cars to stuck at traffic. The more...
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Line 3, column 644, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'treat'
Suggestion: treat
...d to die, but today our scocieties will treats this person for free. Moreover, because...
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Line 4, column 74, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... on the aforementioned argumet, the life situation in present days have make the ...
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Line 4, column 131, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
...esent days have make the life of people more better than then when our grandprents where ch...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, really, so, then, therefore, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.0286738351 209% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2102.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 433.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8545034642 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53657067827 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494226327945 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 669.6 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.8222283236 48.9658058833 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 87.5833333333 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0416666667 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.95833333333 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237166993771 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0703167218384 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0954805726691 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1864574925 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.146084544093 0.0645574589148 226% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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