tpo 8.Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.

Without any shadow of doubt, the media has profound impact on modern people, especially young generations. Some think that there should be restrictions on advertisements targeting children up to five years old.Others, on the other hand, have the opposite viewpoint, believing that there is not necessarily to impose restrictions on such advertisements. I am of the former opinion since these kinds of advertisements are harmful for children as they are very impression, physically and emotionally.

To start with, television advertisements aiming young children have detrimental effect on children's health. Most advertisements shows interesting and inducing scenes of unhealthy foods such as chips and fast foods, stimulating children to eat these foods. When parents bring their children to a supermarket, every now and then, children insist to convince their parent to buy for them chocolates, chips and biscuits. Fast food restaurants such as McDonalds and KFC contribute millions of dollars for advertisement in TV and as a result the both the young generation and parents like to try foods in these restaurants rather than eating homemade food which has much more ingredients and vitamins. Airing advertisements also encourage children having sedentary lifestyle. Instead of going out and playing with other children, they sit in their home and watching TV advertisements since these programs are very attractive for them. As all these examples have shown, advertisements has serious effects on the health of our next generations.

In addition, advertisements have adverse impact on social development of the children. Nowadays, children reluctantly engage in conversations and they are inclined to play with their Ipad or watching TVs. TVs programs especially advertisements has caused children to be isolated themselves. Consequently, children cannot make connection with the others, the trend which will have detrimental effects on their future life as an adult. Moreover, some advertisements show aggressive and action scenes which motivate aggressive and unacceptable behaviours. All these effects would have serious ramifications for our children.

In conclusion, I do agree with the notion that advertisements targeting children should be banned. This policy will help children to be more sociable and healthier and finally will go along way towards having better and socially accepetable community in the future.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 211, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Others
...targeting children up to five years old.Others, on the other hand, have the opposite v...
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Line 3, column 309, Rule ID: EVERY_NOW_AND_THEN[1]
Message: Use simply 'now and then'.
Suggestion: now and then
... bring their children to a supermarket, every now and then, children insist to convince their pare...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, if, moreover, so, then, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to start with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2072.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 363.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.70798898072 4.8611393121 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.24213049078 2.67179642975 121% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564738292011 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 619.2 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.1710807393 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.882352941 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3529411765 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.23529411765 5.45110844103 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251261551733 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0918427734201 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0578948369097 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167651166163 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0204424640386 0.0645574589148 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 11.7677419355 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.84 10.9000537634 145% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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