You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business. Which would you choose to buy? Give specific reasons to explain your choice.
Money is a mechanism, which allows us to buy goods or necessary things for our life. Personally, I believe that purchasing your own business is more preferable than buying a house. I feel this way because of three reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, in order to get a possibility to buy anything we need money. Investing money in business could be that opportunity which allows us to fulfill our needs. After finishing university we have a choice either to apply to the job, or to open a business. Opening a business might be a tough process which requires all of your time and patience. But in future we can get a sufficient benefits from it compared to a basic job, like much higher income. For example, a few years ago my brother decided to open his own moving business, it was a hard decision. The main thing that he needed for it was a truck. In addition to it he also needed customers, who would like to relocate their belongings to other location. In short, only after three years of hard work, he started to get an income from it.
Second, modern job requires a presence on a work five or six days a week and you can barely see your family. In contrast, your own business can give you a possibility to hire a manager and to spend more time with your family if you want so also the freedom to choose what and when to do. My sister’s experience is a compelling example of this. After finishing university she created her own website, where she sell goodies. First, it started like a hobby, but after just a few months this hobby grew up and started to give her benefits. This online business helped her to spend more time with her family and kids.
Finally, we don’t have a cap in salary when we have our own business, the only limit is in our head.
In conclusion, in my opinion purchasing a business can give you much more possibilities than purchasing a house. I think that, because you are getting income from it, you have much more free time and you are not limited in salary.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, second, so, for example, i feel, i think, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, in short, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1661.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 374.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.44117647059 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52743956533 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51871657754 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 544.5 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.3386138428 48.9658058833 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.0952380952 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8095238095 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.19047619048 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248756894039 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0658899505045 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0621478965198 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13760141579 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0538094351091 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.18 10.9000537634 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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