Your city is trying to construct a new building in order to attract more tourists. Which do you think would be the best tourist attraction?
A historical museum
A shopping mall
An indoor amusement park
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Make sure to use your own words. Do not use memorized examples.
It is said that the historical museum would be the best to attract the tourists. I clearly agree with the statement because historical museums create curosity to the tourists to the new culture and historical museums can be a center to learn new things to the tourists.
To begin with, one of the reasons for my specific thought is that historical museums create curosity to the tourists to the new unknown culture. Because tourists usually visit different places of the world to learn about new and unique things. If the historical museum is built the tourists attract mostly for the learning the new culture. I have to admit my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my personal experience. I remember, when I read in the university, I visited India for my study tour. We selected different places for the tour. I found that our teacher and travel advisor discussed the places where different historical museums situated. Our teacher said to us that to create curiosity about any nation one should learn the historical evidence of that nation. At last, we visited the different historical museums of India and I discovered that I learned a huge amount of new things about the Indian nation and it created a huge curiosity for us about the history of India. So, from the example, we can say that a historical museum is a wonderful thing to create curiosity for the tourists.
Secondly, why I illustrate my specific concept is that historical museums can be a center to learn new things for tourists. Because to learn new things tourist usually visit different new places. I think historical museums are a great source for tourists to learn new things. My personal example is a compelling illustration of this. It reminds me of the time when I joined a multinational company. I had to visit Indonesia for official purposes. After reaching the foreign country, I visited various historical museums of that country. I wondered that I learned various new things from my visit. Therefore, from the example, we can say that historical museums can be a center to learn new things to tourists.
To sum up, for the above reasons, I strongly believe that the historical museum would be the best to attract tourists. This is because a historical museum can create curiosity of tourists to the new culture and it can be a center to learn new things for the tourists.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 125, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, second, secondly, so, therefore, i think, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1977.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84558823529 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70369578996 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 212.727598566 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.362745098039 0.524837075471 69% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 619.2 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.4748882049 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.9565217391 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7391304348 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.04347826087 5.45110844103 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203891065366 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0857769294106 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0775964148962 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181829162067 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0478907295387 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.07 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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