your friend have an opportunity to choose one of these majors,which of these following majors do you think is better and choose one
Without any shadow of doubt, as time passes and society develop, people’s attention toward importance of education increases dramatically. Nowadays, it is well understood that education plays vital role in individual’s life. In fact, it has a knock on effect on every aspects of human life as finding adequate job, constructing promising future and so on. In this regard, due to importance of education in individual’s life, there is a heated controversy on whether it is better to study in a major that get the degree sooner and initiate a work promptly after graduation or study in a major for a long time to provide them with more employment opportunity. To the best of my understanding it is better that youngsters study in a major that could obtain a work immediately after graduation and there are a great number of reasons associated with this idea. Although the other people might hold the other opinion, both viewpoints are defendable and counter example might exist. I will cogently pinpoint the reasons to justify my point of view.
To begin with, it is crystal clear that individuals learn more through working. although during the university they acquire a wealth of information in their field, they learn them more effectively when they apply it in their work. Indeed, when they use their knowledge in their works it provides them with a chance to understand their course material in depth. Therefore, working is a great experience that not only helps people to learn more effectively, but also would pay dividend for their future life. As a result, it is better that students initiate their work soon after graduation. Moreover, students who promptly start to work can better remember the course materials that they obtain through university and can use them more effectively.
Moreover, the other option that I choose this idea is when people start to work sooner, this chance really helps them to have communication with the people who are proficient in that field, therefore, it broadens their mind and they can use their experience and also take them as their role model to follow their path. In fact, their advice and their experiences, they gain through work illuminate their way and put them on right track to pursue their ambitious and reach the point to construct prosperous future for themselves.
Last but not least, when students start to work immediately after graduation. They can greatly contribute in progress of their society and helps their society to touch success. however, when they still remain in universities, government should spend money for their education and it has a negative effect on society and it is kind of impediment in progress of society because this money could spend on somewhere which brings back a lot of benefits.
To sum up by taking into account all the above mentioned reasons, the merits and advantages of starting work after graduation completely outweigh the other idea. In fact, these knowledgeable students can greatly contribute in develop of their society and take role in progress of their society. Indeed, when they start work soon they can acquire a wealth of priceless experience in that area which is hardly achieved through studying reference books. As a result, it really helps them to construct the promising future for themselves. It is noteworthy to state that all the reasons which are mentioned above could not be overgeneralized for every situation and it is better a survey is conducted in this issue to shed light on every aspect of these viewpoints.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Although
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...ity and can use them more effectively. Moreover, the other option that I choose this id...
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Suggestion: However
...d helps their society to touch success. however, when they still remain in universities...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, really, so, still, therefore, well, in fact, kind of, as a result, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.0286738351 209% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 79.0 43.0788530466 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 88.0 52.1666666667 169% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.0752688172 272% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2968.0 1977.66487455 150% => OK
No of words: 587.0 407.700716846 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05621805792 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.9222030514 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81335910445 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.432708688245 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 912.6 618.680645161 148% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.3385010211 48.9658058833 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.043478261 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5217391304 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4347826087 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0551456383494 0.236089414692 23% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0170498598963 0.076458572812 22% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0249789175771 0.0737576698707 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0349458123899 0.150856017488 23% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.022053818899 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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