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Although the sale of rhinoceros horns is illegal worldwide, rhinoceroses (Rhinos) are commonly poached (hunted illegally) for their horns, which can be sold for tens of thousands of dollars per kilogram. Rhino horns are so valuable that one type of rhino is already extinct because poachers killed too many of them. All rhinos may soon become extinct unless something is done to help save them. Several ideas have been suggested The first idea is for wildlife experts to “dehorn" Rhinos living in the wild. Dehorning means removing the horns of living rhinos to make them less attractive to poachers Horns can be removed without hurting the animals if medical equipment and drugs to calm the animals are used When this strategy was tried on a small scale in the early 1990s; none of the rhinos dehorned at the time were killed by poachers. The second possibility is to educate consumers. The majority of rhino horn sold is used in medicines Although rhino horn is believed to have health benefits, this belief has no scientific foundation Rhino horn consists almost entirely of keratin, the same material found in human hair and nails. Keratin has no known health value. Educating consumers about keratin could greatly decrease the demand for rhino horn The third possibility is to legalize government sales of rhino horn. Some governments have large amounts of horn, taken from poachers they have arrested. This horn is often kept in storage. However, if government sales were legal, large quantities of horn that governments already have could be sold at very low prices Poachers kill rhinos because consumers pay high prices for their horns If governments started selling cheap rhino horn, rhino poaching would no longer be profitable and would probably stop, at least for a while. That might help endangered rhino populations to recover.

Both the reading and the lecture discuss the universal sale of rhinoceros horns. The writer says that there are several ideas on how to prevent the rhinos from going to extinction. However, the lecturer refutes each of the claims made in the reading.
To begin with, the author claims that dehorning the rhinos in the wild will make them unattractive to poachers. On the other hand, the professor opposes this point by revealing that dehorning of rhinos is highly impractical and very harmful to the rhinos. Moreover, dehorning the rhinos will harm their chances of survival, because the rhinos use their horns to perform several activities such as drinking water and guiding their young ones.
Secondly, the reading notes that consumers need to be educate in order avoid the extinction of the rhinos. According to the reading, this will reduce the demand for rhino horn. Nevertheless, the lecturer rebuts this point by saying that this idea is unlikely to be effective. He explains that medicinal importance is ancient and many people already have strong belief about keratin in the rhino's horn, removing such beliefs will very difficult.
Lastly, the writer avers that legalizing the sale of rhino horn will reduce its price and this will reducing rhino poaching. Nonetheless, the professor contradicts this point by saying that legalizing the sale of the rhinos will only make the business more profitable. According to the law of economics, when the demand of the rhino horn is high, the price of the horn will increasing. leading to poaching activities.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 101, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'reduce'
Suggestion: reduce
...orn will reduce its price and this will reducing rhino poaching. Nonetheless, the profes...
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Line 4, column 374, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'increase'
Suggestion: increase
...orn is high, the price of the horn will increasing. leading to poaching activities.
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 386, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Leading
... the price of the horn will increasing. leading to poaching activities.
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, lastly, moreover, nevertheless, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, such as, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 22.412803532 89% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 30.3222958057 109% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1306.0 1373.03311258 95% => OK
No of words: 256.0 270.72406181 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1015625 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54063653134 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 145.348785872 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.53125 0.540411800872 98% => OK
syllable_count: 398.7 419.366225166 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.8064193367 49.2860985944 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.2857142857 110.228320801 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2857142857 21.698381199 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06452816374 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271059898176 0.272083759551 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0973262914519 0.0996497079465 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0751493502587 0.0662205650399 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163775079515 0.162205337803 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0557725167111 0.0443174109184 126% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.3589403974 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.2367328918 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.42419426049 104% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 63.6247240618 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, lastly, moreover, nevertheless, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, such as, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments