Altruism is a type of behavior in which an animal sacrifices its own interest for that of another animal or group of animals. Altruism is the opposite of selfishness;...

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Altruism is a type of behavior in which an animal sacrifices its own interest for that of another animal or group of animals. Altruism is the opposite of selfishness;...

The reading and the lecture are both about "Altruism" which is the act of self-sacrifice for intrest of others. The author of the reading believes that individual doesn't earn anything from such acts. The lecturer challenges the statement made by the author. She is of the opinion that an individual gains something from the act of altruism.

First of all, the author suggests that unselfish act among people doesn't benefit oneself. It is mentioned that in the case of donation of an organ the doner doesn't receive any reward from it. This argument is challenged by the lecturer. She says the doner receives appreciation and approval from society which can be considered as a reward for such altruistic act. Furthermore, she argues that a person has a high sense of self-worth after such an act.

Secondly, the writer contends this kind of activity is also common in the case of animals. The article states an example of a mammal meerkat among whom one individual acts as a standing guard when all other meerkats look for food and eat while he goes without food and puts himself in grave danger. The lecturer, however, rebuts this assertion by stating that close research on those animals reveals that the mammal that stands guard is the one who already had food and thus doesn't go hungry. She elaborates on this by mentioning that those animals are in the least danger as they are mostly standing near the borrow. Furthermore, when the sentinel gives an alarm it causes other meerkats either to move closer or run about thus taking the predators intrest away from the watching guard. This shows that they are actually less in danger compared to others.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 174, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...of the reading believes that individual doesnt earn anything from such acts. The lectu...
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Line 1, column 211, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...al doesnt earn anything from such acts. The lecturer challenges the statement made ...
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Line 3, column 67, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
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Suggestion: doesn't
...uggests that unselfish act among people doesnt benefit oneself. It is mentioned that i...
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Line 3, column 158, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... case of donation of an organ the doner doesnt receive any reward from it. This argume...
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Line 5, column 476, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
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Suggestion: doesn't
...s the one who already had food and thus doesnt go hungry. She elaborates on this by me...
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Line 5, column 607, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...danger as they are mostly standing near the borrow. Furthermore, when the sentinel gives a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, thus, while, kind of, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 30.3222958057 122% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1385.0 1373.03311258 101% => OK
No of words: 284.0 270.72406181 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87676056338 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61529186467 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 145.348785872 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55985915493 0.540411800872 104% => OK
syllable_count: 422.1 419.366225166 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.2435100552 49.2860985944 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.3333333333 110.228320801 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9333333333 21.698381199 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.73333333333 7.06452816374 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123926256608 0.272083759551 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.038159617868 0.0996497079465 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0354073069684 0.0662205650399 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0802502962651 0.162205337803 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.015447855745 0.0443174109184 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.3589403974 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 53.8541721854 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 12.2367328918 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.42419426049 97% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 63.6247240618 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:

para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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