Integrated essay child development

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Integrated essay

child development

Reading text and lecture are both about the child development. The author article believe that development of child is better if, they play with same age of children. But the lecturer is having completely opposite view point. He is cast some doubt on the point mention in text.

Firstly, reading text state that Conflict between children is redused if, they play with the same age children. On the other hand, the lecturer believe that the conflict is increasing instead of decreasing, when they play together. Because of their same interest in same kind of things. Additionally, he mentions that when children are plys together the chances of teasing and insult is more.

Secondly, The author of this article suggest that mental and physical development of children is happen, whwn they kiddling together. Becasue they experience same thing. On the flip side the lacturer is mention that when sometimes the children is play with same age children their are more chanses of the dissatisfaction. Becasue sometime they did not get, what they want due to similar interest. So, sometime the children is also feeling shy, As a result, of that it will negative impact on child raising.

Finally, The reading passage suggest that when they play together, the cooperation is comes naturally that is more beneficial in development of child. In support to this sentence, the lecturer is placing his view, at the time when the same ageed children come together they forgot about all the differences and play together. Moreover they work together in same hormony.

In conclusion, The author's thought and lecturer view both abouth the effect of same chidren on the development of chikd. The lecturer is effectivelly able to made out his position by giving his opinion.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 233, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...of decreasing, when they play together. Because of their same interest in same kind of ...
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Line 5, column 98, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'happened'.
Suggestion: happened
...and physical development of children is happen, whwn they kiddling together. Becasue t...
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Line 5, column 235, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...turer is mention that when sometimes the children is play with same age children ...
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Line 5, column 277, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...children is play with same age children their are more chanses of the dissatisfaction...
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Line 7, column 29, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...raising. Finally, The reading passage suggest that when they play together, th...
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Line 7, column 328, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
... all the differences and play together. Moreover they work together in same hormony. ...
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Line 9, column 20, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... in same hormony. In conclusion, The authors thought and lecturer view both abouth t...
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Line 9, column 84, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...urer view both abouth the effect of same chidren on the development of chikd. The...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, in conclusion, kind of, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 10.4613686534 163% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 30.3222958057 145% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 5.01324503311 239% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1482.0 1373.03311258 108% => OK
No of words: 290.0 270.72406181 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11034482759 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61791141303 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 145.348785872 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 449.1 419.366225166 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 2.5761589404 272% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.0072910022 49.2860985944 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.3333333333 110.228320801 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1111111111 21.698381199 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06452816374 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 4.19205298013 191% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0925831628279 0.272083759551 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0368393971343 0.0996497079465 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0565371095739 0.0662205650399 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0661893413915 0.162205337803 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0452573333133 0.0443174109184 102% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.3589403974 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 53.8541721854 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.0289183223 76% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 12.2367328918 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.42419426049 93% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 63.6247240618 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.7273730684 51% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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