Integrated TPO 42

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Integrated TPO 42

The article brings three solutions to help birds not to fly through glass windows. Nonetheless, the professor puts those factors under question. According to the professor, none of these solutions will stop birds from being damaged by glasses.

The first solution brought by the passage is that people can use one-way glass instead of the regular one. This glass is transparent in only one direction. In fact, if birds cannot see through a window from outside, they might think the glass is a solid barrier and will not fly through it. However, the lecturer believes that the problem of one-way glass is that it will reflex the light and act like a mirror. So birds might think this reflection is the sky or tree and fly through it.

Another option raised by the article is to paint colorful lines outside the windows. For instance, a design of thin stripes is a good choice. People still can see through lines, while birds would not fly through the window by seeing the stripes. In contrast, the professor makes the point that birds might see the windows as open holes. Therefore, they would like to fly through them. However, architectures can reduce the space between the lines, but the inside of the home get dark.

The last contradiction between the author and the lecturer is whether the artificial magnetic field can prevent the birds or not. According to the author, birds have a natural ability to sense Earth's magnetic fields. So by putting electromagnets in the buildings, we can help them to change their direction away from the building. On the contrary, the professor argues that birds can use the magnetic sense only for long distances. For example, when they want to travel from a cold place to a warm one, their sense helps them to find the right path. On the other hand, for short trips, they use only their eyes and brightness to find the direction. As such, the third solution is not convincing either.

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Average: 7.5 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 60, Rule ID: THE_NN_AND_THE_NN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'are'?
Suggestion: are
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, nonetheless, so, still, therefore, third, while, for example, for instance, in contrast, in fact, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 5.04856512141 297% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 12.0772626932 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 30.3222958057 152% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1600.0 1373.03311258 117% => OK
No of words: 334.0 270.72406181 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79041916168 5.08290768461 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40562853682 2.5805825403 93% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 145.348785872 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511976047904 0.540411800872 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 459.0 419.366225166 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.25165562914 320% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 13.0662251656 161% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 21.2450331126 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.5092353558 49.2860985944 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 76.1904761905 110.228320801 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9047619048 21.698381199 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.47619047619 7.06452816374 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 4.33554083885 231% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.582865012589 0.272083759551 214% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.154310526302 0.0996497079465 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0904405511315 0.0662205650399 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.319859641267 0.162205337803 197% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0742826438284 0.0443174109184 168% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 13.3589403974 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 53.8541721854 136% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 11.0289183223 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 12.2367328918 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.31 8.42419426049 87% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 63.6247240618 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.7273730684 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.498013245 76% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.2008830022 62% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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