Reading Humans have long been fascinated by elephants the largest land animal in the modern world Social animals that live in herds elephants are native to both Africa and Asia Their large ears long trunk and long life span have made elephants one of the

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Reading:
Humans have long been fascinated by elephants, the largest land animal in the modern world. Social animals that live in herds, elephants are native to both Africa and Asia. Their large ears, long trunk, and long life span have made elephants one of the most captivating creatures on Earth. Our long-standing interest in elephants has led to several beliefs about surprising elephant behaviors.
Elephants Are Aware of Approaching Death
One of the popular beliefs is that when elephants become old and weak, they know that they are nearing the end of their lives. They demonstrate this by breaking away from their herds and going off alone to certain locations often found near bodies of water - so called "elephant graveyards" - to die alone. The idea that old elephants seem aware that they will die soon is supported by the discovery of many sites containing bones exclusively of elderly elephants.
Representing Objects through Art
Additionally, elephants seem to have artistic ability. Elephants can be taught to hold a paintbrush in their trunk and use it to paint on a canvas. Some elephants have been known to paint drawings that represent recognizable things: flowers, other elephants, even themselves. This talent makes elephants the only animal other than humans to produce art representing the world around them.
Fear of Mice
Finally, it has long been believed that elephants have a fear of mice. In 77 C.E., the Roman philosopher and scientist Pliny the Elder wrote that elephants are more afraid of mice, small mammals that can do elephants no harm, than of the much more dangerous animals with which elephants normally share an environment, such as lions or tigers. In a recent scientific experiment in which a herd of elephants was confronted with several mice, the elephants backed away from the mice and left the area to avoid them.
Listening:
Elephants are fascinating but the beliefs you just read about are based on misunderstandings of elephant behavior.
First, we should not assume that old elephants are aware that they will die soon just because they break away from their herds. There is a very practical reason why old elephants leave their herds. You see, when elephants get old enough, their teeth become more down and they have difficulty chewing. So elderly elephants wander away from their herds to look for soft vegetation that’s easier to eat. Soft vegetation is usually found near water. That’s why many old elephants graze near water and eventually die there, an area we’ve come to call “elephant graveyards”.
Second, the issue of whether elephants have artistic ability. If you want elephants trained to paint, you’ll notice that human trainers stroking the elephants’ ears whenever the elephant moves the paintbrush. Elephant ears are very sensitive and touching them in certain ways can be used to train the elephants to do tricks. The trainer teaches the elephant to remember certain patterns of paintbrush strokes and then encourages the elephant to repeat the brushstrokes by touching its ears. So an elephant using a paintbrush is just painting lines it’s been trained to paint. It doesn’t necessarily know that the lines are supposed to represent flowers or animals.
Third, Pliny the Elder and others are misinterpreting the reaction of elephants to mice. Elephants that react fearfully to mice aren’t reacting to the mice themselves but to the fact that mice are unfamiliar to them. Being cautious about unfamiliar animals is a natural instinct. But elephants that live in environments where mice are common, like elephants in zoos don’t react with fear to the mice. Clearly, once elephants become familiar with mice and realize that they don’t pose a threat, they don’t mind them.

The listening content totally opposes the reading passage in the belief of elephant behaviors
Firstly, the reading says that they are aware of death because when they are old, they break away from their herds to locations that are near the water to die alone. Yet, the speaker argues that when they are old, their teeth are worn down, so they have to eat soft vegetables, which are located near the water.
Secondly, the reading implies that they represent objects through art because they have known drawing. The lecturer, however, asserts that since elephants’ ears are sensitive, they can be trained to draw the line by stroking their ears, so they haven’t known what patterns they draw.
Lastly, the reading suggests that they are in fear of mice because Pliny the Elder wrote they are afraid of mice and small mammals that do not harm them. Nonetheless, the speaker disputes it and stresses that this is because they are unfamiliar with mice, and being cautious is a natural instinct. Moreover, the reading talks about the fact that in the experiment, when they are confronted with several mice, they back away from the mice. However, the listening defends that when they stay with mice together for a long time, they are not afraid of mice. In other words, when they are familiar with mice and know mice don’t pose a threat to them, they do not mind the mice. Thus, the reading and the listening are contradictory in the issue of the belief of elephant behaviors.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, lastly, moreover, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, thus, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.4613686534 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 22.412803532 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 30.3222958057 102% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1227.0 1373.03311258 89% => OK
No of words: 255.0 270.72406181 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81176470588 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.25588725277 2.5805825403 87% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 145.348785872 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.513725490196 0.540411800872 95% => OK
syllable_count: 365.4 419.366225166 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.6704600379 49.2860985944 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.7 110.228320801 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 21.698381199 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.8 7.06452816374 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 4.33554083885 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0856733523116 0.272083759551 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0469144923102 0.0996497079465 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.037035890314 0.0662205650399 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0719018861383 0.162205337803 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0252014905752 0.0443174109184 57% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.3589403974 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 53.8541721854 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.2367328918 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.42419426049 94% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 63.6247240618 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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