Should schools monitor students' online activities?
With the spread of the internet, the number of students facing undesirable issues online, including cyberbullying, is increasing. In this regard, some people say that schools have to monitor their students' online activities to control their inappropriate internet use. However, I do believe that monitoring them cannot be a great option for the following reasons.
Firstly, schools cannot secure a solid basis for their actions. Monitoring the activities of students is obvious violation of their right to privacy. Thus, to do so, the actions will need to be justified by commonly admitted reasons, such as laws. However, most laws and regulations that currently exist to regulate students' online activities are vague. For example, there is an Illinois Act to prevent cyberbullying and harmful posting. It mentions that schools can take actions to regulate their students when it is reasonable, instead of clearly defining certain situations. If there is no obvious standard to judge the fairness of actions, it will be inevitable to face argues of whether the action was proper. This may even result in a disadvantageous situation to schools, such as happened in Minnesota. Thus, I insist that monitoring students are not a good idea as there are no laws and regulations that will clearly justify schools' actions to monitor students' internet use.
Secondly, investing money to educating students is worthier than monitoring them. The purpose of educating students is to prevent students from misbehaving by letting them know what to do and what not to do. On the other hand, monitoring is more likely to find the users with misbehaviors and punish them. Some young students misbehave just for fun not recognizing how undesirable their actions were. For them, education is the most necessary thing than punishment. On top of that, the cost for educating is more affordable, compared to monitoring many students. Schools are run with confined money, and wise determination of where to spend their money for their students are one of the primary questions. For this reason, I would like to say that schools need to find another way to reduce their students’ online misbehaviors, rather than monitoring them.
Thirdly, schools will not be able to successfully monitor the students’ online activities. The idea of monitoring assume that they will be able to access to all of possible students’ online activities. However, it is impossible. To be specific, many people may have experienced during their childhood that when teachers or parents are trying to prevent them from what they want to do, they would do it secretly rather than not doing it. Similarly, when schools try to regulate students with their internet use, they will find the ways to be out of schools’ supervision by creating secret accounts or buying secret second-handed phones. If then, the schools’ monitoring actions can be useless and just waste of their time and money. Thus, I disagree with the idea of monitoring students to regulate their online activities.
I agree that there will be advantages of monitoring students’ online behaviors to reduce related issues. However, considering its fairness, cost, and expected effect, I believe it would be better to find another way such as educating students about the desirable attitudes to use the internet.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, similarly, so, then, third, thirdly, thus, for example, such as, on the other hand, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 10.4613686534 277% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 5.04856512141 357% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 22.412803532 232% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 30.3222958057 228% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2806.0 1373.03311258 204% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 535.0 270.72406181 198% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24485981308 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80937282943 4.04702891845 119% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87649887635 2.5805825403 111% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 145.348785872 168% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.456074766355 0.540411800872 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 862.2 419.366225166 206% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 3.25607064018 369% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 2.5761589404 311% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 13.0662251656 222% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.886665084 49.2860985944 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.7586206897 110.228320801 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4482758621 21.698381199 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1724137931 7.06452816374 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 4.33554083885 277% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 4.45695364238 292% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.375227281034 0.272083759551 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123358612902 0.0996497079465 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107867159976 0.0662205650399 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.246420266932 0.162205337803 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0468013953076 0.0443174109184 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.3589403974 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.2367328918 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.42419426049 95% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 63.6247240618 187% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.7273730684 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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