TPO-19 - Integrated Writing Task Many consumers ignore commercial advertisements. In response, advertising companies have started using a new tactic, called “buzzing." The advertisers hire people,buzzers,who personally promote (buzz) products to people

The reading and the lecture are about a concept in advertising dubbed buzzing, which is hiring individuals to promote their products. The reading rejects this kind of advertising because of the negative sides, however the lecture casts doubts on all this claims as follows.

First, the article states that hiring someone to pretend that he is an ordinary person that tells his opinion about a certain product is misleading and he could give incorrect information just because it is his job. The lecturer, on the other hand, refutes this claim by saying that those buzzers have been hired to tell about products that they already use and have a positive impression about them. Hence, they are already telling their sincere opinion and delivering correct information based on their own personal experience.

Second, the text claims that when people will tend to be more questionable about the quality of the products if they knew that those buzzers are just hired individual promoting for certain products. In contrast, the student argues that claim is not true, simply because people usually ask a lot of questions about any goods before deciding to buy like the price, the customer service and durability of the product. It very possible that they won't buy it if they did not feel comfortable about any of the things related to that product.

Third, the reading contends that this kind of business does not create honest relationships because it is build on misleading and benefit. The buzzer rejects this opinion because he thinks that the buzzer share their experience about the products in sincere way with other people and if they are not convinced they will not buy it. He added that these kinds of relations make help the people to be more open and sociable.

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Average: 8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 493, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t if they did not feel comfortable about any of the things related to that produc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, second, so, third, in contrast, kind of, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 22.412803532 196% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 30.3222958057 112% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1477.0 1373.03311258 108% => OK
No of words: 297.0 270.72406181 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97306397306 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43615665644 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 145.348785872 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525252525253 0.540411800872 97% => OK
syllable_count: 453.6 419.366225166 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 21.2450331126 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 40.8190929236 49.2860985944 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.272727273 110.228320801 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 21.698381199 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.72727272727 7.06452816374 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29882276125 0.272083759551 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118404790877 0.0996497079465 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0698319220995 0.0662205650399 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178549934705 0.162205337803 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0626747903508 0.0443174109184 141% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.3589403974 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 53.8541721854 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.0289183223 114% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.2367328918 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.42419426049 97% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 63.6247240618 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.498013245 122% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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