TPO-24 - Integrated Writing Task Animal fossils usually provide very little opportunity to study the actual animal tissues, because in fossils the animals' living tissues have been largely replaced by minerals. Thus, scientists were very excited recently

The passage and lecture both discuss three assumptions around an animal fossil, which is dubbed Tyrannosaurus rex (T. rex), and its remaining tissues. The reading posits that found materials in T. rex's leg bone can be the remaining of blood vessels, red blood cells, and collagen. In contrast, the professor explains the arguments of the reading are not convincing and demonstrates some counterarguments.

Firstly, the text puts out the small channels and soft materials inside of the bone could be a suggestion for blood vessels. The lecture refutes this and mentions that it is not necessary those substances were blood vessels. They could be created by bacteria which colonized in the leg's hollow. When bacteria leaved bone, they could remain behind traces of organic materials.

Secondly, the article argues that the investigation of the bone attested the presence of spheres and also the red blood cells. However, the lecturer says the fossils of other animals found in the same place indicate the primitive animals did not have red blood cells. So spheres could not be the remains of the told cells. They possibly had another origin like reddish minerals.

Thirdly, the reading claims that the bone examination, which has been carried out by scientists, affirmed the existence of collagen. The lecturer denies this and says that collagen perhaps cannot last for long time, so finding a 70 million years old collagen contradicts our idea. It can spring from much more recent source such as skin of a researcher who attempted to carry the bone.

Votes
Average: 8.6 (4 votes)
Essay Categories

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, in contrast, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 22.412803532 67% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 30.3222958057 76% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1304.0 1373.03311258 95% => OK
No of words: 254.0 270.72406181 94% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13385826772 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6430902315 2.5805825403 102% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 145.348785872 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610236220472 0.540411800872 113% => OK
syllable_count: 383.4 419.366225166 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.116997792494 855% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 21.2450331126 71% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.4788669492 49.2860985944 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.5 110.228320801 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.875 21.698381199 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5625 7.06452816374 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.27373068433 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.456094145864 0.272083759551 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139599441936 0.0996497079465 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106472458672 0.0662205650399 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.260054637766 0.162205337803 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0684894548426 0.0443174109184 155% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.3589403974 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 53.8541721854 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.0289183223 73% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.2367328918 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 63.6247240618 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.498013245 76% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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the professor explains the arguments of the reading are not convincing and demonstrates some counterarguments.
the professor explains that the arguments of the reading are not convincing and demonstrates some counterarguments.

the text puts out the small channels and soft materials inside of the bone could be a suggestion
the text puts out that the small channels and soft materials inside of the bone could be a suggestion

cannot last for long time
cannot last for a long time

flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 25 in 30
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 12
No. of Words: 254 250
No. of Characters: 1265 1200
No. of Different Words: 153 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.992 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.98 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.545 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 92 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 73 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 43 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 24 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.143 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.303 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.331 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.566 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.063 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4