TPO-30 - Integrated Writing Task A little over 2,200 years ago, the Roman navy attacked the Greek port city of Syracuse. According to some ancient historians, the Greeks defended themselves with an ingenious weapon called a "burning mirror": a polished co

Reading and lecture discusses whether the theory of an ingenious weapon named burning mirror used by Greek to cause fire on ship is true or false. Reading suggests that theory was myth, while professor thinks that explanation in reading is not cogent.

First, reading points out that ancient Greeks were not very intelligent to determine the method to focus sunlight on ship to cause fire and technology was not not advanced to form this type of weapon. Furthermore, large copper sheets were not invented at that time. The professor casts doubt on the statement made in lecture. She says that large copper sheet might not be created from single sheet, but Greeks might have arranged dozens of small sheets to form parabolic shape to reflect sunlight. In addition, she also points out that Greek Mathematicians were cognizant to perform fine task for creating huge copper sheet and shape in to parabola.

Second, reading argues that Roman ship must be steady for ten minutes in order to catch fire by burning mirror. However, professor challenges this point. She thinks that burning mirror can create fire in ship quickly within seconds due to a waterproof material called pinch glued on the surface of Roman wooden ship. In addition, she brings out the fact that all these procedures can also happen when ship is moving.

Thirdly, reading states there is inadequate reasons for Greeks to make this new weapon, because they were expert in shooting burning arrow to destroy enemies from far distance. In contrast, professor thinks that attacking soldiers can easily spot these burning arrows, so they are ineffective in defense. Furthermore, professor adds that soldiers could only see the mirror, thereby burning mirror can set ship on fire without even noticing by anyone. Hence, professor successfully challenged statements made in reading.

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Average: 7.1 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 156, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: not
...n ship to cause fire and technology was not not advanced to form this type of weapon. F...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...copper sheet and shape in to parabola. Second, reading argues that Roman ship m...
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Line 7, column 25, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are inadequate reasons'?
Suggestion: there are inadequate reasons
...p is moving. Thirdly, reading states there is inadequate reasons for Greeks to make this new weapon, bec...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, second, so, third, thirdly, while, in addition, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 30.3222958057 145% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1551.0 1373.03311258 113% => OK
No of words: 300.0 270.72406181 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44262836578 2.5805825403 95% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 145.348785872 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.583333333333 0.540411800872 108% => OK
syllable_count: 461.7 419.366225166 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.23620309051 12% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.7287206473 49.2860985944 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.4 110.228320801 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 21.698381199 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.06666666667 7.06452816374 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 4.45695364238 202% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.356341519914 0.272083759551 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112840591073 0.0996497079465 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0934499987881 0.0662205650399 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210693525645 0.162205337803 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0171551695229 0.0443174109184 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.3589403974 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 53.8541721854 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.2367328918 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 63.6247240618 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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