TPO-31 - Integrated Writing Task A fossil skeleton of a dinosaur called Sinosauropteryx, preserved in volcanic ash, was discovered in Liaoning, China, in 1996. Interestingly, the fossil included a pattern of fine lines surrounding the skeletal bones. Some

Both the reading and the lecture discuss the Sinosauropteryx and it is feather. The passage states that it did not have feather, but, the lecture strongly argues that is feather.

First of all, the reading says that because volcanic activity it's muscle fibre became thin line on the skeleton, it does not meant it had feather. However, the lecture encounter this point by saying that other fossils which they got for some other species are still preserved and it evidence that-the Sinosauropteryx also had the similar kind structure on it is skull.

Secondly, the passage claims that usually all the dinosaur had ornamental thinks but it is frill-not feather. The professor refutes this view by explaining that there is lots of different between frill and the feather, for example, the feather has beta protein but the frill does not. Moreover, fossil remains shows that protein structure while examining it. This strongly suggests that it had feathers.

Thirdly, reading argues that feather which had were in the backbone and tail-it does not helpful for flight or regulating the internal temperature at any cost. Still, the speaker opposes this statement by stating that it is anatomy had different functions. Further, he gives peacock to support his point which explains that peacock uses it display function like attracting male birds like it might be displayed some similar function. Even, fossils confirm that it is attractive orange color.

To sum up, the reading states that it did not have feather because it is decomposition of muscle fibre lines, frills and feather location on the body. But, the professor refutes these points with evidences.

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Average: 8.1 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 121, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'feathered'.
Suggestion: feathered
...The passage states that it did not have feather, but, the lecture strongly argues that ...
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Line 4, column 126, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'mean'
Suggestion: mean
... thin line on the skeleton, it does not meant it had feather. However, the lecture en...
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Line 4, column 139, Rule ID: HAD_VBP[1]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'feathered'.
Suggestion: feathered
... the skeleton, it does not meant it had feather. However, the lecture encounter this po...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 139, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'feathered'.
Suggestion: feathered
... the skeleton, it does not meant it had feather. However, the lecture encounter this po...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 284, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'evidences'?
Suggestion: evidences
...ther species are still preserved and it evidence that-the Sinosauropteryx also had the s...
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Line 7, column 162, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[3]
Message: Did you mean 'there are lots'?
Suggestion: there are lots
...or refutes this view by explaining that there is lots of different between frill and the feat...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 10, column 48, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
..., reading argues that feather which had were in the backbone and tail-it does not he...
^^^^
Line 10, column 341, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'displays'?
Suggestion: displays
...int which explains that peacock uses it display function like attracting male birds lik...
^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 52, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'feathered'.
Suggestion: feathered
...the reading states that it did not have feather because it is decomposition of muscle f...
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Line 13, column 208, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...or refutes these points with evidences.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, third, thirdly, while, for example, first of all, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 12.0772626932 141% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 22.412803532 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 18.0 30.3222958057 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1406.0 1373.03311258 102% => OK
No of words: 269.0 270.72406181 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22676579926 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53298740758 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 145.348785872 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561338289963 0.540411800872 104% => OK
syllable_count: 414.0 419.366225166 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.2760041725 49.2860985944 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.428571429 110.228320801 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2142857143 21.698381199 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.21428571429 7.06452816374 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 4.19205298013 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.27373068433 187% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271389539819 0.272083759551 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0876855920542 0.0996497079465 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0425289109397 0.0662205650399 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135680432625 0.162205337803 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0609520313422 0.0443174109184 138% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.3589403974 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 53.8541721854 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.2367328918 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 63.6247240618 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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The articles and the lecture discusses about some theories about possiblity that Sinosauropteryx had features. The reading passage presents some reasons oppsoing the idea of having features. However, the professor refutes the reasons and points out some discoveries that strongly agrees with the idea about presence of features.